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Postby greatJim » Wed Aug 09, 2006 6:34 am

The life sometimes shows u the painful part. it tortures u,and never let u go out..

But sometimes he is generous,almost out of surprise...

Fangfang was just like an gift to my life..It seemed as if after I walked around in the shadow for so long time,sunlight suddernly came in..I felt warm and had a peaceful mood on my mind.

Until one day ,it was my birthday..

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Postby greatJim » Wed Aug 23, 2006 3:00 am

My birthday was in summer,and that evening,i ordered a cake .

when I took the cake back home,giong through the gate of building district,i saw a girl who was selling flowers.

And I bought a rose ,thinking to give my wife a surprise.

--Fangfang was glad,she kissed me and asked me if her new hairstyle was goodlooking. it was a plait.really thick..

I smiled,and said,"fangfang,i like everything u did for me."

She was so glad and almost skipped to prepared the cake for me.

That night,we made love sweetly.and after that,she said to me softly,"Jim,did u ever give roses to some girls?"

I said no..

Fangfang said,"Jim,i should tell u I had a boy friend before."

"yes?"I touch her plait with hand and said,"Is he handsome?"

"not like u..jim..u are very pure and sexy."She said..

"Do u mean u are not as pure as me?"I asked her carefully.

"yes."she said in low voice.

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Postby greatJim » Mon Oct 16, 2006 5:15 am

I didn't ask fangfang more.since I loved her and that was enough.


But her words made me recollect the past...that was six years ago.......

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Postby Admiral » Thu Oct 26, 2006 4:43 pm

Oh that's very interesting! Does the Jennyzhu thing continue? And maybe you can also continue your old stories they were also very good indeed

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Postby greatJim » Fri Dec 01, 2006 5:24 am

for some reason i had not continued the story for many weeks..

in fact,i don't know exactly what it is going on.. :P

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Postby greatJim » Fri Dec 01, 2006 5:42 am

yes...it was Lan..

who i admired ...and who let me be infatuated.

She was these kinds of girl,how to say...popular ,beautiful,some kinds of graceful not artificially..

anyway,my dear friends,when i tried to imatate some kinds of writing skill from some great books which i read....i found it was still difficult to portray a girl ...

forgive me..i will try and try...

it was a desperate thing,yes..when i met Lan and fell in love with here at first glance.and a desperate love ,hopeless at beginning.

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Postby greatJim » Tue Dec 12, 2006 7:52 am

When i met Lan she had been a teacher.At that time i was in my last year as a student of histroy department.in Fact ,i joined a class we could choosed as a subsidiary major.tha class was water color .i liked drawing when i was a child,as anybody might exeprience...

Lan was a graduate student of dramtic,and as an assistent teacher ,she had many leisure .

We had drawing class twice a week.BUt Lan never came in Wednesday...

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Postby greatJim » Wed Jan 24, 2007 2:21 am

One day we drew a picture of some flowers in a vase.

The teacher was an old man.he was really personable.In fact Lan was so graceful that the old painter always flattered her when he taught us.

When he made example for us,we could have a chance to appreciate his good skill on portraying a matter.

one time he took a white paper in hand and clinched it into a ball.

then he made a sketch of the balled paper by a pencil.In several minutes the shade of the complicated facets produced by the light was drawn vividly on his paper.

It was a wonderful performance.

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Postby greatJim » Fri Mar 02, 2007 2:25 am

"you should know how to draw the shadow,then u can make the object looks vivid on the paper."the old painter told us,when he didn't stop his pencil.

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"Next time i will take u to paint the real thing outside."after a while,he began to stroll around .now and than said something about every student's painting.

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Postby greatJim » Wed Mar 21, 2007 1:25 am

Our next class soon came.

The teacher took us to a lake.
"now look at these beautiful lotus in the lake."
he pointed by finger.
"and you should treat this lesson like a creative work."

I choosed a place to sit down,and opened the color box .
Since i need water to draw.i went to the lake ,taking a bottle.

Lan was there ,too.

"yes?it is a good weather,right?"I said .

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Postby greatJim » Wed Apr 04, 2007 3:29 am

When the story begins,it always has no sign.

Sometimes we expect something to happen,more eager,the result left us more far away.

Lan didn't say anything to me,she just glanced me for a second.and took the bottle of water back to her place.

How should i say?

yes,her pose was so graceful when she crouched down to take the water from the lake.the curve of her body was touching.

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Postby greatJim » Thu Apr 12, 2007 2:35 am

Maybe the good weather outdoors gave me a good mood.Maybe because of Lan's cold atittude to me,I had a quiet status to draw the color water.

The old teacher still walked around like before,and finally he stopped beside me.

"Not bad."He said."Please look this student's draw."

Before i knew what he would say next,other boys and girls had moved their eyes to me.

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Postby greatJim » Wed Apr 18, 2007 2:51 am

The old teacher called the students to gather around me,and he made comments on my draw.

"look,he used transparent speciality of water color very well.How to express the water in the lake by the color.if we just saw it by naked eyes,maybe it was black.but this student didn't use balck color."he said,"that's what i said u should learn how to draw the shadow.the lotus leaves blocked off the sun and made shadow on the water."

"now both the water and the lotus looks with vitality."

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Postby greatJim » Wed May 09, 2007 7:07 am

HOw should we evaluate a painting?

I don't know.

I think art is just art.u can like a painting,or dislike a painting.it is a kind of sense of different person.

Many days later,Lan told me ,in fact,she was not very fond of my painting.

She smiled when she said that,"I like oil painting.It looks more like the real thing."

I didn't say anything,because she was a student in drama department.She knew more about art than me....

"And to be honest,"She said in naughty voice,"U must be greedy to look at my breast that day by the lake.Is that right?Ha ha..."

I laughed .."I admit,but that was not a evil thing.I guess."

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Postby greatJim » Wed May 30, 2007 3:30 am

One day I met Lan in the cafeteria .
There are many cafeterias in our university.

It was a sunny day.She sat at a seat beside the window.I took the meal on my hand and said hello to her.

She smiled and I sat down at the other side of the table.

"How is everthing?are u busy recently?"I asked.

"NOt bad."Lan said.

I could not find any thread.And after a while.She said,"is history interesting?"

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Postby greatJim » Tue Jun 19, 2007 1:50 am

"History is such a major,it could be a mirror ,but if somebody look himself in the mirror everyday.he will became old quickly."
I said after thinking for a while.

Lan said," great.it sound like u are a wise man."

"How is ur major?" i asked .

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Postby greatJim » Fri Jul 13, 2007 7:34 am

"Drama is very interesting."Lan said,"Life is full of dramatic things."

After a while,She smiled suddernly,"I like comedy.Do u want play a comedy with me?"

It seems a question of challenge for me.

"Why not?"I replied.

She laughed .and asked ,"are u serious?"

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Postby greatJim » Thu Aug 09, 2007 3:16 am

My dear reader,i could not recall what I had said in that talk with Lan now.

Sometimes memory was like an ocean...

Have u ever read the story <Norweign Forest>?

It is about a love story.the writer,when was a student in university..a girl,who had been a friend of him when they were young,killed herself at last ,maybe it was a story of phycho...but the writer wrote it with sincere sense..and

how to say.......i mean when a people was young,life sometimes like a hole..as the writer portrayed,a well in a deserted place,a forest....

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Postby greatJim » Tue Aug 21, 2007 1:50 am

"Why did u tell her the vase was put on her desk by ME?!"
Lao chai questioned me .
Evidently,he had been angry with my deed.

In our class,every student had a desk .Mine was next to Xiao ye's .Xiao ye was a lovely girl .Lao chai was chasing her.I knew that.

Last night Lao chai purchased a vase .We were living in a same apartment.

I thought Lao chai had been drunk now.We were sitting in a small restaurant.

I thought it was an ordinary thing.

This morning,when Xiao ye came to the class,she found a new big vase with flowers on her desk.She looked confounded at first.and I told her it was Lao chai's gift.

"Does he?"Xiao ye said,sounds like some kinds of regret in her words.

But the unfortunated thing happened,in the noon Xiao ye threw the vase and the flowers to the dustbin.

I tried to explain why I thought i should tell her the truth at that time.but it was too late.

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Postby greatJim » Wed Sep 05, 2007 4:37 am

Till today,I don't know exactly why Lao chai put the vase on Xiao Ye 's desk silently.

That night,He had drunk so and after he stepped into his room,he negan vomitting vehemently.

I rent another room ,leaving the apartment i shared with Laochai.

I thought I had made a mistake on this thing,and that winter,I got a very bad cold.

I made a call to Lao chai ,he found me and carried me to the hospital by taxi and left.

I met a young girl who was discussing abortion on her with doctor there.I was deeply sorry when I was listening their talk since the girl was so young .
It must be an unexpected preganant.

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The story of Lan and me seemed break off.

When I looked out of the window of the plane,the girl who called me "uncle" opened her mouth suddernly.

"Uncle,u looked very like to see the sky,do u like to see the sea,too?"

I took back my sight and smiled to her.

"yes,The sea,i like it very much."I said to her.(over)

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Postby Elba » Thu Sep 27, 2007 10:57 pm

Great, you began a story, and after that you began another?' or is the same, one story into another. Sorry but I lost.
About what I´ve read, it is in good literary mod. But IMHO I don´t see a conection between first and seceond.

Who Am I to critices you?? the only thing I do is ask your for an explanation.


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