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Postby greatJim » Wed Apr 04, 2007 3:29 am

When the story begins,it always has no sign.

Sometimes we expect something to happen,more eager,the result left us more far away.

Lan didn't say anything to me,she just glanced me for a second.and took the bottle of water back to her place.

How should i say?

yes,her pose was so graceful when she crouched down to take the water from the lake.the curve of her body was touching.

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Postby greatJim » Thu Apr 12, 2007 2:35 am

Maybe the good weather outdoors gave me a good mood.Maybe because of Lan's cold atittude to me,I had a quiet status to draw the color water.

The old teacher still walked around like before,and finally he stopped beside me.

"Not bad."He said."Please look this student's draw."

Before i knew what he would say next,other boys and girls had moved their eyes to me.

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Postby greatJim » Wed Apr 18, 2007 2:51 am

The old teacher called the students to gather around me,and he made comments on my draw.

"look,he used transparent speciality of water color very well.How to express the water in the lake by the color.if we just saw it by naked eyes,maybe it was black.but this student didn't use balck color."he said,"that's what i said u should learn how to draw the shadow.the lotus leaves blocked off the sun and made shadow on the water."

"now both the water and the lotus looks with vitality."

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Postby greatJim » Wed May 09, 2007 7:07 am

HOw should we evaluate a painting?

I don't know.

I think art is just art.u can like a painting,or dislike a painting.it is a kind of sense of different person.

Many days later,Lan told me ,in fact,she was not very fond of my painting.

She smiled when she said that,"I like oil painting.It looks more like the real thing."

I didn't say anything,because she was a student in drama department.She knew more about art than me....

"And to be honest,"She said in naughty voice,"U must be greedy to look at my breast that day by the lake.Is that right?Ha ha..."

I laughed .."I admit,but that was not a evil thing.I guess."

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Postby greatJim » Wed May 30, 2007 3:30 am

One day I met Lan in the cafeteria .
There are many cafeterias in our university.

It was a sunny day.She sat at a seat beside the window.I took the meal on my hand and said hello to her.

She smiled and I sat down at the other side of the table.

"How is everthing?are u busy recently?"I asked.

"NOt bad."Lan said.

I could not find any thread.And after a while.She said,"is history interesting?"

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Postby greatJim » Tue Jun 19, 2007 1:50 am

"History is such a major,it could be a mirror ,but if somebody look himself in the mirror everyday.he will became old quickly."
I said after thinking for a while.

Lan said," great.it sound like u are a wise man."

"How is ur major?" i asked .

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Postby greatJim » Fri Jul 13, 2007 7:34 am

"Drama is very interesting."Lan said,"Life is full of dramatic things."

After a while,She smiled suddernly,"I like comedy.Do u want play a comedy with me?"

It seems a question of challenge for me.

"Why not?"I replied.

She laughed .and asked ,"are u serious?"

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Postby greatJim » Thu Aug 09, 2007 3:16 am

My dear reader,i could not recall what I had said in that talk with Lan now.

Sometimes memory was like an ocean...

Have u ever read the story <Norweign Forest>?

It is about a love story.the writer,when was a student in university..a girl,who had been a friend of him when they were young,killed herself at last ,maybe it was a story of phycho...but the writer wrote it with sincere sense..and

how to say.......i mean when a people was young,life sometimes like a hole..as the writer portrayed,a well in a deserted place,a forest....

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Postby greatJim » Tue Aug 21, 2007 1:50 am

"Why did u tell her the vase was put on her desk by ME?!"
Lao chai questioned me .
Evidently,he had been angry with my deed.

In our class,every student had a desk .Mine was next to Xiao ye's .Xiao ye was a lovely girl .Lao chai was chasing her.I knew that.

Last night Lao chai purchased a vase .We were living in a same apartment.

I thought Lao chai had been drunk now.We were sitting in a small restaurant.

I thought it was an ordinary thing.

This morning,when Xiao ye came to the class,she found a new big vase with flowers on her desk.She looked confounded at first.and I told her it was Lao chai's gift.

"Does he?"Xiao ye said,sounds like some kinds of regret in her words.

But the unfortunated thing happened,in the noon Xiao ye threw the vase and the flowers to the dustbin.

I tried to explain why I thought i should tell her the truth at that time.but it was too late.

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Postby greatJim » Wed Sep 05, 2007 4:37 am

Till today,I don't know exactly why Lao chai put the vase on Xiao Ye 's desk silently.

That night,He had drunk so and after he stepped into his room,he negan vomitting vehemently.

I rent another room ,leaving the apartment i shared with Laochai.

I thought I had made a mistake on this thing,and that winter,I got a very bad cold.

I made a call to Lao chai ,he found me and carried me to the hospital by taxi and left.

I met a young girl who was discussing abortion on her with doctor there.I was deeply sorry when I was listening their talk since the girl was so young .
It must be an unexpected preganant.

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The story of Lan and me seemed break off.

When I looked out of the window of the plane,the girl who called me "uncle" opened her mouth suddernly.

"Uncle,u looked very like to see the sky,do u like to see the sea,too?"

I took back my sight and smiled to her.

"yes,The sea,i like it very much."I said to her.(over)

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Postby Elba » Thu Sep 27, 2007 10:57 pm

Great, you began a story, and after that you began another?' or is the same, one story into another. Sorry but I lost.
About what I´ve read, it is in good literary mod. But IMHO I don´t see a conection between first and seceond.

Who Am I to critices you?? the only thing I do is ask your for an explanation.

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Postby Krisi » Sun Dec 16, 2007 8:46 am

The flow of the story suddenly became so unclear. It just puzzled me! :roll:

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Re: Vase

Postby denvinbo » Fri Dec 28, 2007 4:44 am

What will I say :?: :?: :?: :?:
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Re: Vase

Postby mybikiny » Mon Dec 31, 2007 10:45 am

Great story, GJ. hoping you make it better. i thought you a writter :D

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Re: Vase

Postby denvinbo » Fri Jan 18, 2008 2:45 am

Well, there's nothing to do........ :D :D :D :D
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Re: Vase

Postby shakespear » Wed Feb 13, 2008 7:20 am

"Don't think twice before you listen to your heart. I will think thrice!" it`s wrong .I prefer to say "Don`t think before you listen to your heart I`ll follow it directly. The first love is the true love and the first look is the innocent look .
our life is like a night mare


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