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Like an ocean

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"NICEST POST OF THE MONTH"

Like an ocean

Meaning of this life,
like the chasm of the ocean,
Living in this world,
is a system with emotions,
Power of this life,
in the love that like an ocean,
Freedom in my eyes,
not a fish that in the ocean,
Freedom is a large, larger than the ocean,
Dream in this life,
is just an aim for existence,
Wars in this world,
just a foolish mind resistance,
Reason for these words,
in the depth,...
like in ocean.
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30/10/2006
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You love write poems, not?
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You love write poems, not?
Why not ? I know my poems isn't well, but it helps
me in learning english.
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Cool,,keep up the good work man.I always read your post here. :wink:
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Xkalibur wrote:
You love write poems, not?
Why not ? I know my poems isn't well, but it helps
me in learning english.
just for learning English? or to convey your feelings?
I think the second is more important and it should be the reason to writing poems.

nice poem anyway.
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I like reading poem much but I havent ability enough to compose it!
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Sorry, I don't have said that your poems are bad! I only have make a question :oops:
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Sorry, I don't have said that your poems are bad! I only have make a question Embarassed
That's ok. :)
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Post by Plum »

Yr poem, it's hard to understand ^^" Words are very easy to understand but the meaning of it... so far.
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very good poem, compares ocean to the life, many good thoughts
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While your cup is full

Drink and let others drink
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While your cup is full

Drink and let others drink

Tell me WHY this cup is full...then I will.
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"Like an ocean"

it makes me think about a german song, whose some text is the following :

Du bist mein See (You are my sea)
Und ich schwimme in dir. (and I swin in you)

or (I don't exactly remember)

Ich bin dein See (I am your sea)
Und du schwimmst in mir. (and you swim in me)

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Xkalibur wrote:
While your cup is full

Drink and let others drink

Tell me WHY this cup is full...then I will.
Your cup may be empty or full.
Your cup is empty, because you want, otherwise, it can be full.

WHATEVER YOU LIKE !
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You're right, full or empty, it depends on me.But I'm looking for another answer...
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I don't know how old you are.

But I guess It's too soon for you to have a full cup.

This is your problem , isn't it ?
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PAARSE wrote:I don't know how old you are.

But I guess It's too soon for you to have a full cup.

This is your problem , isn't it ?

A person tries to be separate from
questions: why life is exist, instead of to be absent? what is the essence of life? What is the true life?
It doesn't mean that a person does not guess it.
On the contrary, guesses, but tries to not think...
(*Martin Heidegger)



if there is something wrong in my poems, just say it...no need in walking about.
Me, my lifestyle, my thoughts and my poems- my philosophy.


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I'm not a philosopher, but a usual man with limited mind in this world. Meanwhile I try to think about many questions, such as you wrote.

But, Guess is the onset of Think.

When you guess, you are preparing to think.

Then, perhaps you could detect the truth.




That sentence I said before ( While your cup ...) means that If you are able to help the others or you have ability to serve, you'd be better to do it.
This is a human property.
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:lol: Shokin your song reminds me of swans I often see at German lakes. Everytime I saw them I wanted to eat them. Must be very tasty.
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PAARSE wrote:I'm not a philosopher, but a usual man with limited mind in this world. Meanwhile I try to think about many questions, such as you wrote.

But, Guess is the onset of Think.

When you guess, you are preparing to think.

Then, perhaps you could detect the truth.




That sentence I said before ( While your cup ...) means that If you are able to help the others or you have ability to serve, you'd be better to do it.
This is a human property.



I'm sorry,I'm not good in english,therefore
I got your cup wrong.


:oops:
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And shokin your poem reminds me of a poem I adapted and rewrote from Franz Kafka:

I needs you, who seems to me like a sorrow, which hurts me very much, like the death of one, whom I preferred more than me, like if I'm thrown out into the woods, away from all human, you must be the axe for the frozen sea inside me.
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Admiral wrote::lol: Shokin your song reminds me of swans I often see at German lakes. Everytime I saw them I wanted to eat them. Must be very tasty.
:lol: Eat them ! :lol:

You make me thinking about MOONSORROW !

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Dear xkalibur :

That expression is an Iranian or Persian idiom.
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PAARSE wrote:Dear xkalibur :

That expression is an Iranian or Persian idiom.
which espression?
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But, Guess is the onset of Think.

When you guess, you are preparing to think.

Then, perhaps you could detect the truth.
I guess it should be this expression. Is it?
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Post by babara »

Wow!! Congratulation!! ^_^

Nicest post of the month is yours, Xkalibur. :P
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Thank you very much to everybody. :)
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I think it is a nice poem.
I will try write some words too.
Congratulations.
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Post by shokin »

Nice poem, yes !

But "of this month" ? :lol:



People who are chosen as president, people who get a higher place in a society, get up never for the supposed reasons.

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shokin wrote:Nice poem, yes !

But "of this month" ? :lol:



People who are chosen as president, people who get a higher place in a society, get up never for the supposed reasons.

Shokin
You'd better read the announcement again, shokin!

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Post by dovilorous »

hey there! i thoroughly enjoyed your poem! haha. i still have a long way to go to writing one of such standard though =P. keep it up!
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