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My poem.

Her Broken Christmas.

What happened to her?
This is so weird –
She doesn’t feel the magic on Christmas
Anymore.
Maybe she is a grown up
Already,
But under this makeup and tears
You can see what she really feels inside.
It’s hard to stay strong
when nothing’s right and
everything’s wrong.
She runs away feeling worthless.
It happens often.
You won’t see the truth in her eyes
Because of her charming smile.
You don’t even know her hidden fears and pain.
She wishes she had never dreamt at all,
It all is useless and won’t ever come true,
She knows.
She lost her faith in love.
You stabbed her in the heart.
Isn’t it enough?
People disappoint her,
and world is not perfect at all.
Only that teddy bear was there for her,
so she could hug it and cry to it and talk to it.
She always expects to lose.
If she talks and laughs too hard
It means she tries to forget
her loneliness and sorrow.

Well I am the girl
“who always smiled
even when her heart was broken
and
the one who could always brighten up your day
even if she couldn't brighten her own”.

And now I just want to be left alone
To cry.

This poem touched my heart

You know what? It seems it was made for me...

thank you.

letsjam wrote:thank you.

You're welcome! I'd like to write something like that for my Poetry slam for next Friday! I think I will take some ideas from yours!! It's really nice!

letsjam, you r really good at writing. i remember other poems of yours and i liked them all, but for me, this one is the best. i like your melancholy.

But under this makeup and tears
You can see what she really feels inside.
It’s hard to stay strong
when nothing’s right and
everything’s wrong.
She runs away feeling worthless.
It happens often.
You won’t see the truth in her eyes
Because of her charming smile.
You don’t even know her hidden fears and pain.
She wishes she had never dreamt at all,
It all is useless and won’t ever come true,
She knows.
She lost her faith in love.

I like this...makes me profound. :)
But this all is great also.

I liked because, honestly it seems it was written for me.. like that the writer knew about me and decided to write about how broken Xmas was! Like mine!

Oriani wrote:I liked because, honestly it seems it was written for me.. like that the writer knew about me and decided to write about how broken Xmas was! Like mine!

Oh dear...X'mas was broken like yours? How was it?

Thanks guys.

babara wrote:

Oriani wrote:I liked because, honestly it seems it was written for me.. like that the writer knew about me and decided to write about how broken Xmas was! Like mine!

Oh dear...X'mas was broken like yours? How was it?

Well it means she was lonely/depressed, etc. So her Christmas was broken. Like mine
XD

letsjam wrote:Thanks guys.

babara wrote:

Oriani wrote:I liked because, honestly it seems it was written for me.. like that the writer knew about me and decided to write about how broken Xmas was! Like mine!

Oh dear...X'mas was broken like yours? How was it?

Well it means she was lonely/depressed, etc. So her Christmas was broken. Like mine
XD

Yes, actually I was depressed!

Nice pic but so sad.... :(

well it reflects my mood. heh. =/

and that girl kinda looks like me =]

letsjam wrote:well it reflects my mood. heh. =/

Why are you sad?
You try to find some friend to talking with you or listen to music but not slow music or sad music or watch a comical movie...I think It may help you from sadness or depression. :)

Yeah! I think that picture goes with me..!!!

babara wrote:

letsjam wrote:well it reflects my mood. heh. =/

Why are you sad?

you can find the answer in a new topic that i just posted. Dancing in front of the mirror to music.

It sounds not sad yet meditative. Such pondering moments are sometimes quite precious because it helps us what cheerfulness is. Also, I often seat long for letting my mind wandering around beyond all earthly realities.
To my point, the pic you posted is pretty lovely and looks a bit romantic. But if it was either a real pic boy or girl, it would be far more romantic. Right ?

Lac wrote:It sounds not sad yet meditative. Such pondering moments are sometimes quite precious because it helps us what cheerfulness is. Also, I often seat long for letting my mind wandering around beyond all earthly realities.
To my point, the pic you posted is pretty lovely and looks a bit romantic. But if it was either a real pic boy or girl, it would be far more romantic. Right ?

Excellent!!!!!!!!!

Really itis wonderfull and itis magic.

Wow, really nice poem (I've just read it). :)

Congratulations!! :D

jmiya wrote: I dont see any poems in here, anyways here's a little poem for that beautiful picture .

A girl sitting by the window
dreaming,wishing for her prince
in a rainy afternoon
A day of sadness something
I dont wanna have
But if its reality
I wish i'll be just find

hope you like it and I must say the picture is very inspiring

Uhm not rainy afternoon kinda but whatever :] I like this poem...good job!!!

letsjam your poem is active and very good and I want to communicate with you continuouosly.thanks.

"She lost her faith in love.
You stabbed her in the heart." these words are fantastic and I like them.
If you want to be left alone to cry, I`ll cry with you in your loneliness .GOOD LUCK .