Old & Young

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Old & Young

Postby yali » Tue Dec 11, 2007 2:02 pm

Her thin hair tinned with fair
Theirs are coloured multiple

Having long top she always wear
Their dress is half way short

Dandy garments she make sure
Lousy clothes are they favour

Covered whole bottom she do care
Their fashion is panty shown

An old woman who is peer
Young fellows she can't bare

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Re: Old & Young

Postby Krisi » Tue Dec 11, 2007 3:08 pm

yali wrote:Her thin hair tinned with fair
Theirs are coloured multiple

Having long top she always wear
Their dress is half way short

Dandy garments she make sure
Lousy clothes are they favour

Covered whole bottom she do care
Their fashion is panty shown

An old woman who is peer
Young fellows she can't bare


I like it. Great!

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Re: Old & Young

Postby Oriani » Tue Dec 18, 2007 12:43 am

Yeah, nice message, good rhyme..

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Re: Old & Young

Postby denvinbo » Thu Jan 10, 2008 3:12 am

I have no commands..... :D :D :D :D
Hey! I'm stuck! Get me out!

PIETY-The stories of parents and children

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Re: Old & Young

Postby shakespear » Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:16 am

"Covered whole bottom she do care
Their fashion is panty shown "
IT`S GOOD SIMILE . GOOD LUCK AND THANKS .
our life is like a night mare

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Re: Old & Young

Postby olfa » Thu Feb 14, 2008 5:42 am

This is great ,honestly ! I like it :wink:

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Re: Old & Young

Postby shakespear » Thu Feb 14, 2008 7:08 am

thanks OLFA
our life is like a night mare


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