Old & Young

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yali
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Old & Young

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Her thin hair tinned with fair
Theirs are coloured multiple

Having long top she always wear
Their dress is half way short

Dandy garments she make sure
Lousy clothes are they favour

Covered whole bottom she do care
Their fashion is panty shown

An old woman who is peer
Young fellows she can't bare
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yali wrote:Her thin hair tinned with fair
Theirs are coloured multiple

Having long top she always wear
Their dress is half way short

Dandy garments she make sure
Lousy clothes are they favour

Covered whole bottom she do care
Their fashion is panty shown

An old woman who is peer
Young fellows she can't bare
I like it. Great!
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Yeah, nice message, good rhyme..
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I have no commands..... :D :D :D :D
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"Covered whole bottom she do care
Their fashion is panty shown "
IT`S GOOD SIMILE . GOOD LUCK AND THANKS .
our life is like a night mare
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This is great ,honestly ! I like it :wink:
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thanks OLFA
our life is like a night mare
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