Check it for me please

[sangvu]

Hi everybody, i'm new and hope to make friend with all of you. Please fix this essay for me if i had any mistakes in it.Thanks you very much.
English is very important because it help you so many thing in life. So i attended English class at night three day a week. The teacher gave us many useful activities and i loved it. We watched a video about the britain family life. It's very interesting but i found it very difficult because they spoke too fast to understand most of it. I think we should watch the video in the short pieces and go back and watch it again until we understand the main points. The second thing we have to do is going outside and talking with people in the street. It's quite exciting but we felt embarrassed about speaking. Actually we didn't have enough question to ask them and we should prepare it at home and practise them before going out. After the cousre we had a test. It will check how understanding we are in the cousre. Although this test is very difficult but it very useful after each cousre. We didn't have enough guidance from the teacher during the test and we need more guidance from the teacher. The test allow us to know our strongness and weakeness. So i fond of doing the test.

[cosmo]

Dear Friend

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[denvinbo]

Hi everybody, i'm new and hope to make friend with all of you. Please fix this essay for me if i had any mistakes in it.Thanks you very much.
English is very important because it help you so many things in (whose)life. So i attended an English class at night three days a week. The teacher gave us many useful activities and i loved it. We watched a(you watched a film or many films) video about the Britain family life. It's(in an essay, people don't abbreviate) very interesting but i found it very difficult(to do something) because they spoke too fast to understand most of it. I thought we should have watched the video in a short pieces and went back and watched it again until we understood the main points. The second thing we had to do was went outside and talked with people in the street. It's quite exciting but we felt embarrassed about speaking. Actually we didn't have enough(question is not enough==>use many is better) question to ask them and we should have prepared it at home and practiced them before went out. After the course we had a test. It checked how understanding we were in the course. Although this test was very difficult but it was(lost to be) very useful after each course. We didn't have enough guidance from the teacher during the test and we needed more guidance from him(don't repeat the same words in a sentence). The test allowed us to know our strongness and weakeness(what are these 2 words mean, they have wrong grammar). So i fonded of doing the test(if you use present simple for this sentence, it will digress).

===>Why did you use past simple above and present simple below??? Is there any suitable about grammar of this paragraph??
If you let me know the grammar you have used for this paragraph, I will let you know more about your mistakes......

[shakespear]

YOUR EXPRESSION IS GOOD BUT YOU HAVE SOME MISTAKES IN GRAMMAR . GOOD LUKE .

[shakespear]

YOUR EXPRESSION IS GOOD BUT YOU HAVE SOME MISTAKES IN GRAMMAR . GOOD LUKE .

[denvinbo]

2 times, shakespear...........

[shakespear]

denvinbo trust me I don`t know how it happened .thanks a lot .

[denvinbo]

:)

[shakespear]

dear denvinbo I`d like to thank you :) :) :)

[denvinbo]

You are too ceremonious.............. :)