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Post by shakespear » Sat Feb 09, 2008 2:02 pm

crocodile Tears


I'll go away for ever more
From you I got only pain
You don't care for my groan
Tears on cheeks are like rain
I'll leave and you will see
That I'll take the first train

* * *
Lament. . Lament crocodile Tears
Can't utterly persuade me
Don't you remember past days?
Together we were at the sea
Thence you swore to me
That your love I'll be

* * *
Your conceit is lovely thing
Look at me I became thin
You know you `re full of guilt
And god won't forgive your sin
Our love has become fight
In this fight you must win
our life is like a night mare

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Re: poem

Post by denvinbo » Sun Feb 10, 2008 5:52 am

Where's it from??

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Re: poem

Post by shakespear » Sun Feb 10, 2008 6:00 am

THIS POEM IS MINE AND I PRODUCE IT. DON`T BE AMAZED.
our life is like a night mare

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Re: poem

Post by Bambang » Sun Feb 10, 2008 8:15 am

shakespear wrote:THIS POEM IS MINE AND I PRODUCE IT. DON`T BE AMAZED.
Beautifully written!
We're all friends, right?

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Re: poem

Post by denvinbo » Sun Feb 10, 2008 12:23 pm

Good....Better than I used to be.....

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Re: poem

Post by shakespear » Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:25 am

denvinbo ,MY FRIEND ,WHY DO YOU SAY THAT ? AREN`T YOU USED TO READ LIKE THIS ? BE OVER THIS LEVEL ; THNKS A LOT.
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Re: poem

Post by shakespear » Thu Feb 14, 2008 7:18 am

hi my friends I want to thank you and hope to meet in future . Bye
our life is like a night mare

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Re: poem

Post by Vega » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:03 am

Hi there. I like your poem. :wink:

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Re: poem

Post by Krisi » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:30 am

shakespear wrote:crocodile Tears


I'll go away for ever more
From you I got only pain
You don't care for my groan
Tears on cheeks are like rain
I'll leave and you will see
That I'll take the first train

* * *
Lament. . Lament crocodile Tears
Can't utterly persuade me
Don't you remember past days?
Together we were at the sea
Thence you swore to me
That your love I'll be

* * *
Your conceit is lovely thing
Look at me I became thin
You know you `re full of guilt
And god won't forgive your sin
Our love has become fight
In this fight you must win

This poems are sad.
I admire people who can write effectively but just wondering do you feel what you write?
You've got a thread of poems here and they are all sad... Why? :roll:
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Re: poem

Post by denvinbo » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:35 am

That is his state of mind..........

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