my First poem

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my First poem

Postby ladymae » Fri Feb 15, 2008 5:05 pm

For my little sister...

Honey bee Isabella

You are so tiny like a white daisy in the field

Mom and Dad so proud of you...

The day when you was born

All angles and wood fairy sing sweet song for you

la la la la la....la la la la la

The rainbow across from the clear blue sky

to give you a wish

bab bo da be bo da bo

so sleep tight in sweet nice

and wake up with the first sun shines

I am still here

waiting your little smile from your lips

And the first time I hold you in my arms

I know you are a treasure of their life

Remember me honey

Remember me

I am a Lady who loves you

.......


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Re: my First poem

Postby Vega » Fri Feb 15, 2008 5:24 pm

Congratulations with your First poem! Hope you will compose more poems in the future! :)

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Re: my First poem

Postby ladymae » Fri Feb 15, 2008 5:59 pm

Thank you so much

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Re: my First poem

Postby denvinbo » Sat Feb 16, 2008 2:53 am

Well done....It's not bad for the first time..............
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Re: my First poem

Postby shakespear » Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:20 am

Ladymae your poem is very good specially when you say "waiting your little smile from your lips

And the first time I hold you in my arms " .Good luck my friend .
our life is like a night mare

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Re: my First poem

Postby shakespear » Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:20 am

Ladymae your poem is very good specially when you say "waiting your little smile from your lips

And the first time I hold you in my arms "
our life is like a night mare

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Re: my First poem

Postby Krisi » Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:36 am

shakespear wrote:Ladymae your poem is very good specially when you say "waiting your little smile from your lips

And the first time I hold you in my arms "


hahahahaha :lol: So, our brother Shakespear here has changed his feelings...Good! :) Just don't forget Babara, OK! :P

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Re: my First poem

Postby shakespear » Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:47 am

Ladymae your poem is very good specially when you say "waiting your little smile from your lips

And the first time I hold you in my arms " .Good luck my friend .
our life is like a night mare

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Re: my First poem

Postby sweets » Sun Feb 17, 2008 6:37 pm

it's very good as first peom
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Re: my First poem

Postby denvinbo » Mon Feb 18, 2008 2:29 am

You posted 3 times, shakespear.............
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Re: my First poem

Postby Sunnypk » Wed Feb 20, 2008 2:56 am

it's nice :)
keep it up!
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Re: my First poem

Postby Annaa » Fri Jun 13, 2008 9:03 am

Very nice ;-)
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