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Re: PIETY

Postby denvinbo » Sun Mar 30, 2008 2:01 am

Do you want to have another?
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Re: PIETY

Postby Krisi » Sun Mar 30, 2008 2:48 am

denvinbo wrote:Do you want to have another?


Yes, please!

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Postby denvinbo » Sun Mar 30, 2008 12:50 pm

I'm too busy, darling!

_Darla - my daughter - indicated a small bird flying in the sky, said:
- Mom, look at that!
_I was concentrating on driving, thinking about my day jobs, I said "Yes" as usual:
- Uhm!
_She disappointed....
_I asked her, but I didn't understand anything at all:
- What, darling?
- Nothing, mom...
_My 7 years old daughter answered. A whole valuable time passed. Near home, I drove slowly for the two to find the white deer if it got out of the grass grove in the evening! But there's nothing. I said:
- I guess it too busy, It will get out tonight!

=.=.=.=

_Had dinner, took a bath, answered and called....I was very busy until Darla went to bed...
- Come on, Darla, it's time to sleep!
_She ran hastily upstairs. Tired of long busy day, I kissed her cheek and covered her body with the blanket. She suddenly said:
- Mom, I forgot to give you this!
_I were impatient, I said:
- Tomorrow, Darla!
_She shook her head:
- Tomorrow, you will be busy again!
_I tried to argue:
- I will spend time for you!
_Sometimes, although I tried, time still stuffed through between my 2 fingers space as sand. I seemed to be never had enough time for husband, child...and even myself....
_She didn't stop, in angry, she shrank her flecked nose and shook her chesnut hair:
- No, you will have no time! Like as today, when I told you see the bird, you paid no attention to what I said.

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Re: PIETY

Postby Krisi » Sun Mar 30, 2008 2:40 pm

denvinbo wrote:I'm too busy, darling!

_Darla - my daughter - indicated a small bird flying in the sky, said:
- Mom, look at that!
_I was concentrating on driving, thinking about my day jobs, I said "Yes" as usual:
- Uhm!
_She disappointed....
_I asked her, but I didn't understand anything at all:
- What, darling?
- Nothing, mom...
_My 7 years old daughter answered. A whole valuable time passed. Near home, I drove slowly for the two to find the white deer if it got out of the grass grove in the evening! But there's nothing. I said:
- I guess it too busy, It will get out tonight!

=.=.=.=

_Had dinner, took a bath, answered and called....I was very busy until Darla went to bed...
- Come on, Darla, it's time to sleep!
_She ran hastily upstairs. Tired of long busy day, I kissed her cheek and covered her body with the blanket. She suddenly said:
- Mom, I forgot to give you this!
_I were impatient, I said:
- Tomorrow, Darla!
_She shook her head:
- Tomorrow, you will be busy again!
_I tried to argue:
- I will spend time for you!
_Sometimes, although I tried, time still stuffed through between my 2 fingers space as sand. I seemed to be never had enough time for husband, child...and even myself....
_She didn't stop, in angry, she shrank her flecked nose and shook her chesnut hair:
- No, you will have no time! Like as today, when I told you see the bird, you paid no attention to what I said.

To be continued....... :wink:


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Postby denvinbo » Mon Mar 31, 2008 3:17 am

_I was too tired to think the answer. But she said correctly my "black-heart", so that I hoped she sleep well. But after then, I was not out of harassing: "There's no longer my daughter and I live together before she get marriage and leave me to have her own family". I was thinking of her gray eyes....
_My husband asked:
- Why are you sad?
_I told him everything. He said:
- Darla can be still awake. Why don't you go and check?
_His voice was full of power of right-behavior parents. I listened to him, went upstairs, sad and worry mixed... I opened the door silently, light from the window covered her small body. In her hands, there was a crushed paper. I opened her hands slowly and look what made the disagreement between Darla and me.....
_I cried... She teared to pieces the paper drawn a big heart and her poem named: "Why do I love my mom?"
_I joined those pieces carefully, I read her poem for me:
Why do I love my mom
Although she is busy and do hard works....
She always spend time to play with me...
I love her because
I'm the biggest part
Of her busy day!
_Her sentences like as an arrow attacked my heart. 10 minutes later, I brought a food tray to Darla's room. On the tray, there was 2 cups of hot chocolate with cream, 2 cheese-cookies, peanut and marmalade. I touched her cheek lightly, my heart want to break because...I love Darla....
_Her bent eyelash moved... She woke up and saw the tray. She asked, surprised because woke up at midnight:
- What for, mom?
- For you, because you are the biggest part of my busy day!
_She smiled and drank chocolate in asleep. Then she continued sleeping without understood my real-heart sentences...

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Re: PIETY

Postby Krisi » Mon Mar 31, 2008 3:28 am

denvinbo wrote:_I was too tired to think the answer. But she said correctly my "black-heart", so that I hoped she sleep well. But after then, I was not out of harassing: "There's no longer my daughter and I live together before she get marriage and leave me to have her own family". I was thinking of her gray eyes....
_My husband asked:
- Why are you sad?
_I told him everything. He said:
- Darla can be still awake. Why don't you go and check?
_His voice was full of power of right-behavior parents. I listened to him, went upstairs, sad and worry mixed... I opened the door silently, light from the window covered her small body. In her hands, there was a crushed paper. I opened her hands slowly and look what made the disagreement between Darla and me.....
_I cried... She teared to pieces the paper drawn a big heart and her poem named: "Why do I love my mom?"
_I joined those pieces carefully, I read her poem for me:
Why do I love my mom
Although she is busy and do hard works....
She always spend time to play with me...
I love her because
I'm the biggest part
Of her busy day!
_Her sentences like as an arrow attacked my heart. 10 minutes later, I brought a food tray to Darla's room. On the tray, there was 2 cups of hot chocolate with cream, 2 cheese-cookies, peanut and marmalade. I touched her cheek lightly, my heart want to break because...I love Darla....
_Her bent eyelash moved... She woke up and saw the tray. She asked, surprised because woke up at midnight:
- What for, mom?
- For you, because you are the biggest part of my busy day!
_She smiled and drank chocolate in asleep. Then she continued sleeping without understood my real-heart sentences...

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Re: PIETY

Postby denvinbo » Tue Apr 01, 2008 3:00 am

Volunteered Angels

_A few days before Christmas Eve, my neighbor's child came and gave me an angel made by cardboard. He stood at the gate, base his body on the fences, and said loudly to me:
- This is a "false" paper angel, there's no angel in this world, right?
_I looked at his eyes and said:
- Yes, there is. It's the truth. And I have 2 ones..
_The boy looked around:
- Where?
- I wish you know me sooner, so that you can see them staying with me. But what a pity! There's no one now...
_The boy opened his eyes loudly and looked at me again:
- And where are they now?
- Where are they? - I directed my eyes to the far horizon - There! They are under that star!

To be continued.... :wink:
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Re: PIETY

Postby Krisi » Tue Apr 01, 2008 5:07 am

denvinbo wrote:Volunteered Angels

_A few days before Christmas Eve, my neighbor's child came and gave me an angel made by cardboard. He stood at the gate, base his body on the fences, and said loudly to me:
- This is a "false" paper angel, there's no angel in this world, right?
_I looked at his eyes and said:
- Yes, there is. It's the truth. And I have 2 ones..
_The boy looked around:
- Where?
- I wish you know me sooner, so that you can see them staying with me. But what a pity! There's no one now...
_The boy opened his eyes loudly and looked at me again:
- And where are they now?
- Where are they? - I directed my eyes to the far horizon - There! They are under that star!

To be continued.... :wink:


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Postby denvinbo » Wed Apr 02, 2008 3:42 am

- Is it true? Are you lying me?
- It's the truth!
- I don't believe, if there was an angel, no one would leave them.
- Because you don't know, at that time... I didn't know, too. I was very silly. Those 2 angels always took care of me...
- There's no one live with angels without know who they are!
- That's strange! But not only me, but also many other people...
- Angels usually live with children. So you were small at that time, weren't you?
- Yes!
- But why do they love children?
- Because before gave the baby for them, God took a little part of angel's heart and putted it in the baby's chest. So that when they've just heard the baby's heart-moving sound, angels would feel moved, and they even cried...
- Do angels like crying? So... they must be no humorous...
- Yes, they cried, but that's they love for the baby they would protect and bring up. Sometimes, they had to cry all their life. But they were too busy, they even "drank" their own tears because they couldn't use the handkerchief, they were also afraid the tears would make the baby wet, then had ill...
- You lie me, there's no angels silly like that!

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Postby denvinbo » Thu Apr 03, 2008 11:00 am

_The boy laughed when he heard what I said. Beat him, I continued:
- And then, one day. The baby was taken care would grow up, then he said to the angels: "I go now. Please don't be the prevention of my way".
_The boy surprised:
- And what did they answer?
- Angels? They looked each other silently and gave all their goods to him. And what a callous boy. He brought the suitcase on his shoulder and went away, had no plan to return...
_The neighbor's boy seemed to be moved:
- Then angels went inside their house, closed the door and cried, didn't they?
- They didn't have that time! They flew hastily high to the sky, looked to the boy's way. The boy was still a baby! Sorry! He was a tall boy, so that he walked fast and far... Angels were too old. Although they were tired, they still tried to follow the boy. Until there was a black point and then disappeared, they could go back home, closed the door, turned off the lights, looked each other silently... and cried then...
- But where's that boy?
- It's not important. The major is those angels. They lost the baby, meant that they lost a part of their heart... They felt spacious because under their wings had nothing to protect. In fact, they could relax, but... Do you know? Because those wings were used too long, so the muscles were stiff, they wanted it to close, but they couldn't...

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Postby Krisi » Thu Apr 03, 2008 12:32 pm

Your story is funny now... no direction. :)
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The continuation is ready to post..... :wink:
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Postby Krisi » Tue Apr 08, 2008 1:13 am

denvinbo wrote:The continuation is ready to post..... :wink:


Where is it my friend?

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Postby denvinbo » Tue Apr 08, 2008 3:04 am

Krisi wrote:
denvinbo wrote:The continuation is ready to post..... :wink:


Where is it my friend?

(How did you celebrate your 14th B-day last Saturday Denvinbo?)


A big cake with strawberry cream and vanilla...... :wink:
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Postby Krisi » Tue Apr 08, 2008 3:09 am

denvinbo wrote:
Krisi wrote:
denvinbo wrote:The continuation is ready to post..... :wink:


Where is it my friend?

(How did you celebrate your 14th B-day last Saturday Denvinbo?)


A big cake with strawberry cream and vanilla...... :wink:


Nice! Here's a kiss from me... :arrow: :P wipe the lipstick... :lol:
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Postby denvinbo » Tue Apr 08, 2008 11:28 am

_The boy said like as arguing with me:
- He didn't remember about those angels who took care of him and protected him, did he?
- I don't think so... When the weather became windy and rainy, sure that he would remember the wings had protected him. He could cry for a long time, to forget...
- You said... That person only remembered those wing's uses, he was not actually felt sorry for those 2 angels?
_The neighbor boy's question made me stopped for a whole. I held the "false" angels tightly in my hands, directed my eyes to the far horizon in sunset and couldn't said anything...
_Until a wind flew, I continued to said:
- He also thought about that then...
- When?
- When he understood that... He couldn't come back to the past forever. And he remembered...
- Why didn't he return?
- Because... That boy, one morning, he suddenly got up and found that on his back grown 2 wings. It's mean he was an angel, too...
- Wow, is that wonderful? He could fly with those wings, couldn't he?
- Because you don't know, those wings couldn't fly, it was used for protecting...
- Strange? What did those wings protect for? Was the new angel's job different from the former?

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Postby denvinbo » Sat Apr 12, 2008 2:52 am

- No different. At that time, there was a small house under the wings. A family. Babies God had just given. There's love and tears.
_The neighbor boy heard it, inferred:
- So that being an angel is hard and no confident!
- Yes, very hard. But they changed that hard into happiness.
_Listened to me, the boy looked at me a whole and asked:
- You said... there's really have those 2 angels.
_I shook down my head:
- Yes!
- So... why don't you return?
- I have said to you. I can't go back. When we recognized, everything was late.
_The boy shook his head:
- I don't understand...
- When you grow up, you will understand. Now, you don't know, until your father, mother...

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Postby denvinbo » Tue Apr 15, 2008 9:14 am

The end of the story is ready......... :lol:
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Postby Krisi » Tue Apr 15, 2008 10:37 am

denvinbo wrote:The end of the story is ready......... :lol:


Can't understand, you have just started and now you're near the end of the story... :roll: I can't see the point!!! hahahahaha :lol:
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Postby denvinbo » Tue Apr 15, 2008 1:12 pm

The Volunteered Angels still continue.........I just have the end for this story.... :wink: :lol:
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Postby denvinbo » Sat Apr 19, 2008 9:02 am

_I hadn't finished yet, the boy took over:
- My father? he works all day and has to teach at night, he has no time to play with me... And my mother? She only knows about cooking, doing the laundry, cleaning the floor and complaining... Boring!
_The boy was talking than his mother appeared in front of the gate, speak loudly:
- What are you doing, child? Going home and having dinner!
- So, do you see? - The boy angry - She is always like that, complains all time. Forcing me to eat all day! Boring!
_And the boy stood up, said good bye and went back to his home. Both running and speaking:
- If I had 2 angels like you, I wouldn't live in this hell like now!
_"Boy! You don't understand now. And when you understand... everything seem to be too late...!"

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