Daddy

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LavanyaPandian
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Daddy

Postby LavanyaPandian » Fri Jul 04, 2008 10:34 am

Daddy!

How naïve I was!
You endured me
Day in and day out!

I, your eldest,
Never gave a damn
Still, you were awesome.

Now,
I remember you;
With due respect.
Love you;
Every ounce.

When I think I am old enough
I understand you better!
Only, I have you not to share.
To share, how I feel about you.

Life is mystery daddy,
Sometimes full of life
Yet, with few emptiness.
But I remember you, nevertheless.

Oh! How I wish I had you
How I wish I can share things with you
How I wish I had enough time;
To show you how much I love you…

Pls give me comments on graammar/usage of words

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Re: Daddy

Postby sweets » Fri Jul 04, 2008 1:39 pm

it's the first time that i read here something about dads it seems u like him so much

thanks for sharing us
cheeeeeeeeers
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Re: Daddy

Postby angeleyez » Fri Jul 04, 2008 2:55 pm

Wauw .. very nice poem... Keep it up {-; {-;
Please... Correct me if I have a spelling mistake !

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Re: Daddy

Postby JasmineQ » Sun Jul 06, 2008 1:19 am

great poem :-)
dad deserves more than those pretty words

thank you
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Re: Daddy

Postby LavanyaPandian » Mon Jul 07, 2008 7:42 am

Dad deserves much much more, only i dont have him with me to give what he deserves. He passed away long back, and i miss him so much at every bounce in my life.

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Re: Daddy

Postby Annaa » Sun Jul 13, 2008 3:15 pm

Very nice poem,cuz I think that only few people write poems about fathers,people more write poems about mothers :lol: :lol: :mrgreen: .
If you don`t like me remember it's mind over matter..I don't mind and you don't matter..


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