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When mind looks like a mine...

Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2008 10:14 pm
by shokin
When mind looks like mine



My head will explode.
My blood will flow on the road.
And my mind will explore
The door on the floor.

I can't sleep, I sweat.
Like a toy I can't enjoy.
When I pray they play. *
They say "Way may lay the day."

Can't be hungry, can't be angry.
Cannot cry, can't find any sky.
Can you hope when game is dirty ?
Can you believe shame is pretty ?



* I wanted to write it : "When I pray and pay they stay "okay" and play hockey." but it's too long. :lol:



Don't panic, it's fictive... my mind is healthy, motivated, happy and optimistic. :lol:



Shokin

Re: When mind looks like a mine...

Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2008 11:57 pm
by loola
wooow wooow and wooow
ur words are so beautiful ..
yes i swear i like it

thank u shoin

Re: When mind looks like a mine...

Posted: Mon Sep 08, 2008 8:49 am
by angeleyez
wauw.. very Good ! I like it, too... :mrgreen: :mrgreen: keep it up! {-;

Re: When mind looks like a mine...

Posted: Wed Sep 10, 2008 4:59 am
by Krisi
shokin wrote: When I pray they play. *
Shokin
I think so! (dreadful, huh?) :~:

Nice poem Shokin...

Re: When mind looks like a mine...

Posted: Fri Sep 19, 2008 12:27 pm
by Psixochka
Krisi wrote:
shokin wrote: When I pray they play. *
Shokin
I think so! (dreadful, huh?) :~:

Nice poem Shokin...
+1 :-D
not bad work :-D

Re: When mind looks like a mine...

Posted: Mon Sep 29, 2008 6:14 am
by LoOost
wooooooooow
I agree with you guys its wonderful.
hope you write something for us again. {-; {-;