Pure Hatred prt. 2

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Tido
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Pure Hatred prt. 2

Postby Tido » Wed Dec 10, 2008 7:15 pm

Your bones to ashes
I hated you so
my words to dust
mother said let go...
HATRED
created this monster lurking inside of me
He says yes, I say no
He says make a mess, I say when well you go?
He never rests, father I hate you so...
I fell ill to this test, your poison, your addiction...
HATRED
for you tanted my soul
monster grows stronger by each passing day
I grow weary to your trickery
please, stay away
I can't stand your mockery
the smell of his felthy array
HATRED
FATHER!!! come meet your Demon Child
come meet your blasphomay
I welcome you to my salvation
come meet the monster in me
lust for chaos...
I wait for the day of my salvation...

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Re: Pure Hatred prt. 2

Postby Psixochka » Thu Dec 11, 2008 5:26 pm

Well, your both poems are full of negative emotions and I see that you just throw your bad feelings in them. I think you should edit your poems or write another one.
Scio me nihil scire. (Latin)
I know, that I know nothing. (By Socrates)

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Re: Pure Hatred prt. 2

Postby shakespear » Sat Dec 13, 2008 9:41 am

hi friend :
i think this poem expresses sth inside ur heart.in addition i think u r suffering.
any way it`s good although it`s surrealistic.
gd luck friend.
our life is like a night mare


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