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DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Sat May 09, 2009 1:06 pm

DON`T BLAME ME
I can feel you through this far distance
And can sense your soul sing and dance
Eve had tempted Adam to eat the forbidden apple
And you`re now blaming his spoiled sample
I`m like my ancestor full of lust
And always long to the lovely bust

Tears like pearls rose at your eyes
I couldn`t stand seeing them I became unwise
Your hand severely squeezed my heart
It`s your haunt, my valuable part
It holds your love, your name, your features
And you’ve thought you`re one of the weakest creatures…
When your tears rose at your eyes
But I saw them and became unwise

Truly I came from unknown time, unknown place
Like a damned ghost, I couldn`t show my face
I`m mere a name, a word, and may be a lie
And I know I gave you a painful sigh
I`ve tasted the pleasure like sea foam
But I`ve known pain engraved as doom -home
Don`t you know you`re my original substance?
And I’m now living with you lovely romance
So don`t mention Elena, Barbara or the other
And let`s forget, I think that`ll be better
Un-weak… although pearls dropped on that florid rose
Your hand squeezed my heart and made it pose

From the beginning I`ve said I’m worse than the devil
You`ve also had your own lust and needed me to fill
So you`ve quickly wide opened your door
And invited me to enter..I`m the moor
Why did u ever pick up libido -seed?
And planted it to satisfy your need?
You are like me, yield to your longing part
So don`t blame me, I have my soft heart
our life is like a night mare

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby sweets » Sat May 09, 2009 5:35 pm

oh my God
it's marvellous shaki i did not read something great for you for along time

stronge back {-: wellcome back man :-D

buti have question"So don`t mention Elena, Barbara or the other"

so it's for whommmmmmmmee?????????????????????????????????

do not make me wait plz..................... :oops:
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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Sun May 10, 2009 8:39 am

hi sweet and thnx for this comment and i like to know about u .where r u now?how is ur work? how r ur fa and mo and ur family all?
about the poem i said that koz a woman blamed me that i mentioned these names and she said "and who knows what else"
so i said " im now with u so don`t mention barbara and elena"
as i expected u r the first one that sent me the comment.
thnx again
plz tell me about ur family and about u
c u and gd luck
our life is like a night mare

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby Mohyiedine » Sun May 10, 2009 1:02 pm

what can i say only you are very good , frankly you are playing by words readily, and the best thing i like in this poem rich vocabulary , i was useful about it and i have found stiffness to understand this poem Coz you put difficult words for me, but that good to give me ability to improve my english and try to develop it.
i'll say it agian it's wonderful poem and i hope to you all best and all wishes.

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby sweets » Sun May 10, 2009 1:39 pm

hllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllleo
the woman who said that maybe think that ur CASANOVA {-;

so ur heart like batterfly form one rose to anther are you in new love? :?:

for me and family...what to say things daily change with one hope to bring happiness but in vain
about me just kicking and alive
cu
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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Tue May 12, 2009 9:53 am

hola
"like butterfly from one rose to another" wonderful simile and i think its better the poem itself.
i`m so sorry that i feel u r lost koz of occupation and i hope u will find job and live in peace.
i like to send u the poem of my blamer i mean the woman who blamed me .
gooooooooooooooooooood luck and c u soooooooooooooooooooon
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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby sweets » Tue May 12, 2009 1:40 pm

hellllllllllllo
i hope so and iam waiting to know the mystry woman

waiting to read poemcu
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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Wed May 13, 2009 9:16 am

hi
here i will showthe poem of my woman-friend from philipene and it seems very good poem. she read my poems at englishclub and send me this poem:

No Promises
I have frozen my heart for the longest time
Because of the loves that I thought were, but were not
Then came a dark star, in the most unlikely place and time
In the most unlikely manner…
Why did I ever open my door to that knock?
And so I went on to believe all that talk
More than he knew I let him into the depths of my being…
And into my soul…
He was already melting my being, and hurting my gut
Then I knew I was not the original subject of his woes...
There was Elena, then Nadia, and who knows who else!
It's good, you know... the pain and the pleasure of winning a friend
From discovering the truth and knowing your space
And finally accepting your fate.
Feeling the truth right from the start
You succumb to that part of you that longs
And opened your heart ready for wounding
They say it's love
I say it's not
It's the weakness of longing for someone
Having made yourself believe that you love being alone
You trapped yourself in your own box
And just when you thought you were shot dead
Standing up made you realize
Wham! Life is better than when you didn't experience that near death moment.
our life is like a night mare

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby sweets » Wed May 13, 2009 2:14 pm

hellllllllllllllllllo
tell me who is that woman?????????
is her name start with O :?:

i like her poem but she put herself in big puzzle that who she can be sure of ur feelings

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Thu May 14, 2009 7:17 am

hi sweet
her name doesn't start with o.
plz tell me what u mean she put herself in big puzzle?
how can she be sure of my feelings?
i did not get it, sorry may be my mind is confused..!!!
c u and thnx 4 this comment.
our life is like a night mare

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shokin » Thu May 14, 2009 6:37 pm

This poem is not to blame !
It's not a shame !
We remember your name !
It's only a great fame !



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Nous sommes libres. Wir sind frei. We are free. Somos libres. Siamo liberi.

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Fri May 15, 2009 4:17 pm

jajajajajaj
hello shokin
long time ago we didn't meet so i'm very happy 2 meet u again
i think u comment on my poem with poem
its gd idea
thnx
c u
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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shokin » Fri May 15, 2009 11:09 pm

Actually I blame you because of your sms language. :mrgreen:

shakespear wrote:jajajajajaj
hello shokin
long time ago we didn't meet so i'm very happy 2 meet u again
i think u comment on my poem with poem
its gd idea
thnx
c u


:lol: The real Shakespeare would not be proud of you. :lol:



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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Sun May 17, 2009 8:36 am

hi
i'm so sorry and i thank you on this note but trust me i used to use this writing and i wish to leave this custom.sorry again and forgive my fault.
c u {-:
our life is like a night mare

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby Psixochka » Sun May 17, 2009 1:06 pm

Hi, Shakespear!!!

I think your poem is really great!!! And I like it very much!!!
Especially I like the third part of the poem :-)

Good luck
Scio me nihil scire. (Latin)
I know, that I know nothing. (By Socrates)

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Mon May 18, 2009 4:49 pm

thnx my friend and really u encoraged me and i like to meet u more in the future.good luck and thnx
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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby justme » Tue May 19, 2009 8:06 am

shakespear wrote:DON`T BLAME ME
I can feel you through this far distance
And can sense your soul sing and dance
Eve had tempted Adam to eat the forbidden apple
And you`re now blaming his spoiled sample
I`m like my ancestor full of lust
And always long to the lovely bust

Tears like pearls rose at your eyes
I couldn`t stand seeing them I became unwise
Your hand severely squeezed my heart
It`s your haunt, my valuable part
It holds your love, your name, your features
And you’ve thought you`re one of the weakest creatures…
When your tears rose at your eyes
But I saw them and became unwise

Truly I came from unknown time, unknown place
Like a damned ghost, I couldn`t show my face
I`m mere a name, a word, and may be a lie
And I know I gave you a painful sigh
I`ve tasted the pleasure like sea foam
But I`ve known pain engraved as doom -home
Don`t you know you`re my original substance?
And I’m now living with you lovely romance
So don`t mention Elena, Barbara or the other
And let`s forget, I think that`ll be better
Un-weak… although pearls dropped on that florid rose
Your hand squeezed my heart and made it pose

From the beginning I`ve said I’m worse than the devil
You`ve also had your own lust and needed me to fill
So you`ve quickly wide opened your door
And invited me to enter..I`m the moor
Why did u ever pick up libido -seed?
And planted it to satisfy your need?
You are like me, yield to your longing part
So don`t blame me, I have my soft heart

hi !
i just read your poem , you are good poet , i like your poetry style but i want mantion here that some time girls will be right but men can't understand her !
its just my opinion no arguments well best of luck here i am new so i would like that u feel dont mind ...
keep sharing with us !
Love is the master key that opens the gates of happiness.

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Mon Jun 29, 2009 12:01 pm

hello
even u r new its ok koz we r all equall and there is no diffirence among us. u r welcome any time , anywhere.
i like to be ur friend
thnx
our life is like a night mare

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby farah » Tue Aug 04, 2009 11:08 am

oh
good poem but i think you are ladies'man (Don juan) koz u mention many women
i like it
c u
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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby shakespear » Sat Aug 08, 2009 10:27 am

hello
do u like to be one of them?
i'm waiting ur reply
c u
our life is like a night mare

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Re: DON`T BLAME ME

Postby MARI » Tue Aug 11, 2009 7:19 pm

you are a gooood poet .....i think that your soil in wrting poems ...


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