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Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Sat Aug 29, 2009 8:14 am
by LEATRICE
Rich "sound" content
alliterations, consonances, assonances
it's an interesting piece of poem

But the last couplet somehow destroys the continuity and congruity :-(

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2009 9:12 am
by shakespear
hello
i think u r right but i intended to do that and i was able to do alliteration
thnx 4 this comment and really u seem expert in literature
c u and have gd luck

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Thu Sep 10, 2009 9:28 am
by farah
Hi I aske sweet about u and her but she didn't answer me and I think u can answer me please r u in love with her.? I am sorry about this question but I want to know I am not envy her .i shall wait for the answer .bye

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Thu Sep 10, 2009 9:38 am
by shakespear
Hi I think its not ur affair in addition I'm here to hear comment on my poem not to hear that and I wish she loves me koz she is very education and has high spirit so if she loves me I'll swim in the sea at night in the winter and account the sand of the shore and drops of rains and leaves of trees so don't ask me about that again plz …..
thnx

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Thu Sep 10, 2009 10:05 am
by sweets
shakespear wrote:Hi I think its not ur affair in addition I'm here to hear comment on my poem not to hear that and I wish she loves me koz she is very education and has high spirit so if she loves me I'll swim in the sea at night in the winter and account the sand of the shore and drops of rains and leaves of trees so don't ask me about that again plz …..
thnx
good respons 8-)

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Thu Sep 10, 2009 10:50 am
by shakespear
hi sweet and thnx 4 this
c u and have nice day

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Sat Sep 12, 2009 10:42 pm
by Player
sonnet (noun): a poem of fourteen lines using any of a number of formal rhyme schemes, in English typically having ten syllables per line

Well, it's 14 lines ok. And most have 10 syllables.

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Sun Sep 13, 2009 8:29 am
by shakespear
hello
thnx palyer 4 this msg but u did n't value my poem so plz send me ur comment about the poem
best wihes friend

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Sun Sep 13, 2009 8:44 am
by Player
I think it's a very clever strange sonnet.

But if you intend it to be a sonnet - typically with 14 lines and typically 10 syllables per line (which seems to be what you do intend) - then I think you should try to fix the lines that don't have 10 syllables.

Just my humble opinion, since you ask me to value your sonnet :roll:

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Wed Sep 23, 2009 9:36 am
by shakespear
hello
its typical as u said , the poem contains 14 linesand every line has 10 syllables .it is ab ab cd cd ef ef gg so plz show me what have i to do?
really u seem very good in poetry and i like to make use of ur information.
c u bye

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 6:07 pm
by shakespear
hello lovely friends

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 3:29 pm
by shakespear
hello player
really i like to contact u and know from u something about poetry so plz let's meet
thanks and have nice moments

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Sun Sep 11, 2011 1:53 am
by shakespear
hi

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Sun Sep 11, 2011 3:12 am
by Lara
it's a tongue twister :D

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2011 1:59 am
by shakespear
it has meaning beside the tongue twister...ok

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2011 4:52 am
by Lara
Shakes this poem i need to read it again and again to got well its meaning :-)

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Mon Oct 17, 2011 4:45 am
by shakespear
hi
its hard to be pronounced
{-:

Re: strange sonnet

Posted: Fri Sep 15, 2017 10:01 am
by shakespear
shakespear wrote:Strange sonnet

Don't depart O dear! Days are delightful dreams.
Let's live lovely life, lick lips lustfully.
Buy beauty beside bliss, buy big bright beams.
Sing so soft songs, "Siren" start songs slightly.

* * *
You're yap yearn to yoke, years yarn the yellow
Hey hobo here! Have ye heeded hind?
Fight foes for freedom, fall down for fellow.
Can't you come closely? Can't you keep kind?

* * *
My mass's much, Magian maid made me mad.
Tiny titmouse touched torn temper timely.
Save sick single, sinking in sins, still sad.
Rude rook raped roe, rain ran round road roughly.
Can you guess my poem either good or bad?
Don't be shy please! And show your opinion frankly.
I THINK IT'S NOT VERY GOOD
ANY WAY, IT'S MY WORK