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CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Tue Jul 28, 2009 5:25 pm
by sweets
Can you close your eyes for a while and forget world around ????

I tried that many times before but i could'nt because iam a part of this world

"So for who get many downs in their lives including me i wrote these lines"

Can't you see beauty around calling you to enjoy with her? can't you see the beauty of child's smile how senstive how pure?


Can't you smell roses, flowers
the smell of soil after rainy night ????
Enjoy with that


Can't you hear bird's singing ,leaves movement how magical
Or waiting to hear you name's lettlers are spelt form beloved lips???


Can't you touch things around no matter how soft or rought they are??


Can't you taste joy ,passion wether sorrow or sweet?

Since you and me can see ,hear , touch ,taste and smell So why you do not open your eyes widely and enjoy life ,Do not stand alone

LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 29, 2009 6:07 am
by Psixochka
Hi, sweety {-;

LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK - these words are my favourite!!!
Sometimes I walk in the city and feel so happy, I enjoy just seeing trees, smell favour of sea... I like your poem 8-)

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 29, 2009 7:36 am
by Vega
sweets wrote: LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK
It should be: "Life is short, stand and think".
Some people are used to postpone to think about something they have on their minds for another "beautiful day". That day never comes.

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 29, 2009 11:37 am
by shakespear
hello every body
sorry sweet i was not here to commet ur poem .
i think ur poem is free verse but the words are beautiful and go deep inside souls.the words also touch the hearts and leave an effect on them. the style and idea is very good although i like to hear rhymed lines but its ok.
i wished i were the 1st to comment ur poem so forgive me
any hope to be ur..................
c u and gd luck

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:24 pm
by sweets
woooooooooooooooow
3comments for the first day how lucky iam
shakespear wrote:hello every body
sorry sweet i was not here to commet ur poem .
i think ur poem is free verse but the words are beautiful and go deep inside souls.the words also touch the hearts and leave an effect on them. the style and idea is very good although i like to hear rhymed lines but its ok.
i wished i were the 1st to comment ur poem so forgive me
any hope to be ur..................
c u and gd luck
do not worry for not being the first and you know me well i like to try every thing :-D and thank you so much for ur comment
Xkalibur wrote:
sweets wrote: LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK
It should be: "Life is short, stand and think".
Some people are used to postpone to think about something they have on their minds for another "beautiful day". That day never comes.
you did'nt read my oddes for a long time so reading ur comment make me happy about ur idea about life i agree and do'nt agree sametime as i said before LIFE IS SHORT so the time we used to think we can use to live new experince iam not saying to do something wrong to experment it but thinking sometime kills the moments of joy which hardly we live it.
Psixochka wrote:Hi, sweety

LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK - these words are my favourite!!!
Sometimes I walk in the city and feel so happy, I enjoy just seeing trees, smell favour of sea... I like your poem 8-)
so did i dear a moment for pure to forget all pains

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Thu Jul 30, 2009 7:16 am
by shakespear
hello
u r welcome
don't u know who u r for me??
c u

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Thu Jul 30, 2009 5:18 pm
by sweets
shakespear wrote:hello
u r welcome
don't u know who u r for me??
c u
i know who you are my best friend
cu

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2009 1:17 pm
by shakespear
hello
read this.....
i know you're know
ask me i won't say no
we're friends, don't you think so?
if u ignore me, when i'll then go?
i know and you know
my back became like bow
o dear! hundreds oh and oh
your beauty made me undergo
i know you're know
thnx and c u soooooooooooooooooooooooooon :-D

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 1:54 pm
by sweets
wait
beacuse i know that u know that what i know
let's stay as we are
since i can't play with u
since i can't cheat u

so you know what i know

cu

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Sun Aug 02, 2009 2:55 pm
by shakespear
hello
................
hurry up an' don't say wait !
we always are slow and late !
cheat me if this will be my fate ,
check me and say my rate !
cheat me but don't say wait !
cheat me ,i won't hate,
accept me in any state !
......................
thnx and good luck

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Mon Aug 03, 2009 2:09 pm
by sweets
snice the heart says YES
but mind says NO

fix this if u can

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Mon Aug 03, 2009 4:20 pm
by shakespear
hello
whom will u follow heart or mind??
be careful before answer!
c u and goooooooooooooooooooood luck

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Mon Aug 03, 2009 5:16 pm
by sweets
when mind get tired
when heart is bleeding
when eyes never stop searching
it'll TAKE long time to decide

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Tue Aug 04, 2009 10:31 am
by farah
hello
really u r skillful
i think u win
c u

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 6:27 pm
by sweets
thanx farah for ur words but u did not tell me win WHAT {-:

thanx for ur comment

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2009 10:07 am
by shakespear
hello she wanna tell u that u won on me in this conversation don't u think so but i think u can't win on me
ok royal poetess
c u and good luck

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Mon Aug 31, 2009 1:46 pm
by sweets
hi dear friend how are u and how is rammdan with u shall u come and have eftar with us {-:

i know that i can not win on u but days for u days for me {-;

i wrote new odde last night and call it THE EDGE as i remmber i think u'll like it snice it's sad one

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 11:40 am
by farah
hi
where is the poem and what are happening beteween you and shakespear??
you are lovers.
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Sat Sep 05, 2009 8:15 pm
by sweets
helllo farah
farah wrote:hi
where is the poem and what are happening beteween you and shakespear??
you are lovers.
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i think it's out of ur intersed whether we are or not

sorry for being too harsh with you

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Sat Sep 12, 2009 9:26 am
by virgo
actually it's a perfect idea about happiness

but i like that view
especially ur description with the optimistic look
thank u {-:
keep it up

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Sat Sep 12, 2009 10:22 am
by monaji
Well done
go ahead :-)

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Sat Sep 12, 2009 6:27 pm
by sweets
thank you monaji

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Mon Jan 17, 2011 7:32 am
by sweets
it's nice to read ur old writes againe !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Mon Jan 17, 2011 3:50 pm
by manar
hi sweets,ur writing touches my heart
KEEP WRITING

Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Tue Jan 18, 2011 1:01 pm
by sweets
thanx for ur words