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virgo
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erase me

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erase me erase my memory
erase my life erase any feelings in me
make me forget how it feels when i'm with u
let me suggest how to end it up with me
as i told u it's so easy
just erase me erase my memory
i don't wanna remember how i was so in love with u
i don't wanna surrender when i find myself in the end without u
so please before u leave don't forget to
erase me erase my memory
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Re: erase me

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What an emotional poeme, Erase me, erase my memory!
True feelings, words come from the heart and wrote from lover's fingures........
I see, it has deep meaning but in my view you could complete this poeme Coz its topic is deeply and has too many stuffes you could talk about........
Any way, you wrote it and the matter was finished :-D
I hope you go on in this way and be more careful in your topics because i touch from your writting, you will become better one by one Coz your feeling is upper
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Re: erase me

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Mohyiedine wrote:What an emotional poeme, Erase me, erase my memory!
True feelings, words come from the heart and wrote from lover's fingures........
I see, it has deep meaning but in my view you could complete this poeme Coz its topic is deeply and has too many stuffes you could talk about........
Any way, you wrote it and the matter was finished :-D
I hope you go on in this way and be more careful in your topics because i touch from your writting, you will become better one by one Coz your feeling is upper
well i'm glad that u like it
n i agree with u that was a short poem n may be if i completed it it could be better
any way i'll try harder in the next time :)
thanx 4 ur support n ur opinion
sure i'll take ur advice n i'll be more careful ^__^
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Re: erase me

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virgo wrote:erase me erase my memory
erase my life erase any feelings in me
make me forget how it feels when i'm with u
let me suggest how to end it up with me
as i told u it's so easy
just erase me erase my memory
i don't wanna remember how i was so in love with u
i don't wanna surrender when i find myself in the end without u
so please before u leave don't forget to
erase me erase my memory


"""so please before u leave don't forget to"" it's easy to say it, but hardly we will do it, memories will stay in our minds forever
:-D
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virgo wrote:erase me erase my memory
erase my life erase any feelings in me
make me forget how it feels when i'm with u
let me suggest how to end it up with me
as i told u it's so easy
just erase me erase my memory
i don't wanna remember how i was so in love with u
i don't wanna surrender when i find myself in the end without u
so please before u leave don't forget to
erase me erase my memory
really fantastic and i hope u please us with more and more poems like this
i think english club will be refreshed again by all kind ppl like u and it will be good again after the languor, weakness....
so to all my friends ...we have to try to write good poems like this and other good writings of my friends here...
thnx all
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Re: erase me

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"...erase my memory..."

I loved that phrase!
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