When hope ledt me i miss the way
Do not worry i did not lost even i forget the way the old way
Now i can feel happy.. maybe sad...maybe i do not know
What iam sure that i stopped running behind hopes behind old dreams inspite of being hard to me to live without DREAMS
The truth both ways are hard to live in to be like a machine or to fly in dreamland
both are full of danger plans hard crosses painfull choices
In the middle iam standing i can not remember how long seconds .. minutes .. hours ..or years i can not remeber wating for new light to walk towadrs a clue whatever is or still trying to find my way in drakness
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Hi. Don't worry that nobody lefts replies, maybe they read..get impressed and don't find right words to write..
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hi
i wasn't here when u write this and u know where i was so plz execuse me for not replying u and comment on this poem...
the poem is good and need some revise:
When hope led me i miss the way
Do not worry i did(am) not lost
even (if )i forget the way, the(that) old way
Now i can feel (i'm) happy..
maybe sad...
maybe i do not know
What iam sure that i stopped running
behind hopes... behind old dreams
inspite of being hard to me
(and )to live without DREAMS
The truth (was) both ways are hard to live in
to be like a machine or to fly in(to )dreamland
both are full of danger plans, hard crosses, painfull choices
In the middle i am standing
i can not remember how long seconds .. minutes .. hours ..or years
i can not remeber wating for new light
to walk towadrs a clue
whatever is or still trying to find my way in drakness
now i think its great
gd lk
i wasn't here when u write this and u know where i was so plz execuse me for not replying u and comment on this poem...
the poem is good and need some revise:
When hope led me i miss the way
Do not worry i did(am) not lost
even (if )i forget the way, the(that) old way
Now i can feel (i'm) happy..
maybe sad...
maybe i do not know
What iam sure that i stopped running
behind hopes... behind old dreams
inspite of being hard to me
(and )to live without DREAMS
The truth (was) both ways are hard to live in
to be like a machine or to fly in(to )dreamland
both are full of danger plans, hard crosses, painfull choices
In the middle i am standing
i can not remember how long seconds .. minutes .. hours ..or years
i can not remeber wating for new light
to walk towadrs a clue
whatever is or still trying to find my way in drakness
now i think its great
gd lk
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goodmorning
first thank you so much for corrcting me u know how much i hate grammar it ties me and u know how much free iwana to be no rules at allllllllllllllllllllllllll
( iwanna to run the world in my way hahaha )
i belive in words to express feelings not in grammar maybe we are differnt at this point (which is more important meaning or grammar) in oddes and i'm sure most of people here agree with you
thanx for ur comment and correts agine
waiting ur new poem
first thank you so much for corrcting me u know how much i hate grammar it ties me and u know how much free iwana to be no rules at allllllllllllllllllllllllll
( iwanna to run the world in my way hahaha )
i belive in words to express feelings not in grammar maybe we are differnt at this point (which is more important meaning or grammar) in oddes and i'm sure most of people here agree with you
thanx for ur comment and correts agine
waiting ur new poem
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hello
u wanna live free koz u have poetess's soul but we can ignor grammar koz most meanings depend on grammar so it is one of the important bases of language for instance: i see u. & i saw u. the meaning is different in two sentences so past and present have different meanings.
its my point of view but first and final the matter is urs.
thnx and have sweet moments
c u
u wanna live free koz u have poetess's soul but we can ignor grammar koz most meanings depend on grammar so it is one of the important bases of language for instance: i see u. & i saw u. the meaning is different in two sentences so past and present have different meanings.
its my point of view but first and final the matter is urs.
thnx and have sweet moments
c u
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hellllllllllllo
and thanx
for ur comment about how grammar is imporant so let's make a deal ..............
i write and u correct me gramatically
(this odde was the last one i wrote )
maybe i'm still in this stage so i can not write new thing after i pass it and i guess (i'll not pass)
takecare
and thanx
for ur comment about how grammar is imporant so let's make a deal ..............
i write and u correct me gramatically
(this odde was the last one i wrote )
maybe i'm still in this stage so i can not write new thing after i pass it and i guess (i'll not pass)
takecare
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hello
i think u r good in writing poems so u can continuo and i think u can write great poems when u want and i'll be happy to help u in grammar and in arranging ur poems
ur words hold supreme meanings and u have great ideas and thoughts so why u lose all these things?
we can help each others and write great poems
i won't forget ur help when u send ur comment and really ur comment sometimes inspire me in writing more and more so plz don't stop ur comments
thnx and have nice times
c u
i think u r good in writing poems so u can continuo and i think u can write great poems when u want and i'll be happy to help u in grammar and in arranging ur poems
ur words hold supreme meanings and u have great ideas and thoughts so why u lose all these things?
we can help each others and write great poems
i won't forget ur help when u send ur comment and really ur comment sometimes inspire me in writing more and more so plz don't stop ur comments
thnx and have nice times
c u
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goodmorning
thanx for ur cheering words but belive me wen i hold the pen and strat to write i have no feelings no emotins to talk about ifeel like empty glass and this touchring me and hurting me much
maybe i just scare to write agine
thanx agine
thanx for ur cheering words but belive me wen i hold the pen and strat to write i have no feelings no emotins to talk about ifeel like empty glass and this touchring me and hurting me much
maybe i just scare to write agine
thanx agine
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hello
i think u r great so plz go ahead and don't fear to write , don't fear to make mistakes, i think u r bold
i'm waiting ur new poem
c u
i think u r great so plz go ahead and don't fear to write , don't fear to make mistakes, i think u r bold
i'm waiting ur new poem
c u
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thanx for ur cheeeeeeeeeerings
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Dear Sweets
One time when kannan asked baskar
How did you feel without sweets in your life?
Immediately he told
when we seeing the sky in the night, there are countless stars are sparkling.It is Okay.
But among stars if the full moon is not appearing there, when the sky is not looking beautiful.
samething when my sweets is not in my life, my life is not beautiful.
from the baskar's diary
Murugan
One time when kannan asked baskar
How did you feel without sweets in your life?
Immediately he told
when we seeing the sky in the night, there are countless stars are sparkling.It is Okay.
But among stars if the full moon is not appearing there, when the sky is not looking beautiful.
samething when my sweets is not in my life, my life is not beautiful.
from the baskar's diary
Murugan
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hi
plz reply on my message
plz reply on my message
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Nice poem. Sweets :)
All the best for further writing.
All the best for further writing.
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thanx for ur comment sunny
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U welcome dear sweetssweets wrote:thanx for ur comment sunny