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Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:33 am
by shakespear
Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?” ……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:37 am
by shakespear
shakespear wrote:Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?”

……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 7:20 pm
by sweets
hi

frankly i do not know wht to write it's like a story i read it and imagen it sametime imagen how passion and love help heroin the poem to pass time and not to forget her

ur great man

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 9:44 pm
by shakespear
hello
ok u r the first to comment my poem and i think did not like it much koz u didn't appreciate it, u didn't say if its good or bad . but as u said it is like story , indeed its a story happened inside a jail. a story of one loves and dreams to meet his sweetheart again.
thnx 4 ur comment
gd lk

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Fri Aug 20, 2010 7:46 am
by farah
shakespear wrote:Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?” ……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time


YOU ARE FANTASTIC

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Fri Aug 20, 2010 8:47 pm
by sweets
shakespear wrote:hello
ok u r the first to comment my poem and i think did not like it much koz u didn't appreciate it, u didn't say if its good or bad . but as u said it is like story , indeed its a story happened inside a jail. a story of one loves and dreams to meet his sweetheart again.
thnx 4 ur comment
gd lk
my dear freind
i did not say it's bad one i like it
i still loosing my talent i do not know wht's up if u ave any advices plz send some

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:40 am
by msaabneh
oh my god!!! did you write this?

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:59 am
by msaabneh
i am an English literature graduate. yet, i thought this poem belongs to Shakespeare. plz mention your real name here. its a crime for a person like you to be nameless. i want to put it on my Facebook page, so i wouldn't put it without your name.

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2010 6:32 pm
by RoseRed
Nice poem, i liked it, sorry i'm busy these days! u are nice poetman! kisses

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Aug 30, 2010 6:52 pm
by shakespear
thanks 4 those who show comments
any one wants to write it on facebook its ok
my name is darkstar
thnx again 4 ur comments
gd lk
c u

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 5:14 am
by farah
Hi
I didn't see this poem on facebook yet. Please tell me when you put it in facebook.
:mrgreen: :mrgreen: :mrgreen:

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Sep 06, 2010 11:08 am
by shakespear
hello
i do'nt know when he'll put it on fb
u can ask him
his name is msaabneh
c u

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Tue Sep 14, 2010 9:37 am
by fanuun
NICE FLOW. YOU ARE REALLY GOOD.

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Wed Sep 15, 2010 8:10 pm
by shakespear
thanks fanuun
i'd like to hear comment and i wish u pick up mistakes from my poem that i think u will give me expensive gift.
thnx again and accept my regards
c u and gd lk

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2010 6:27 pm
by farah
hi
I miss you all
Any new poem?
see you
{-; {-; {-; {-; {-;

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sun Sep 19, 2010 7:33 pm
by shakespear
hello
really no new poems yet
may be in next few days, i don't know ...
poet needs inspiration
thnx 4 ur comment
c u

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Tue Sep 28, 2010 6:49 pm
by farah
Hi
I shall send you my picture to give you inspiration please write a poem on me
Thanks
Best wishes {-: {-: {-:

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Thu Sep 30, 2010 5:17 pm
by shakespear
inspiration isn't given by photos only it's given by chatting and feelings
now u know that? i hope u got it
any way i'll be glad to get ur photo, it's my pleasure to c ur face and figure....
c u

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Wed Oct 13, 2010 3:49 pm
by farah
Hello
Please can you write a poem about me?
I send messege to you please read it and answer me.
I will wait to read the answer.
Bye

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Thu Oct 14, 2010 5:46 am
by Aimee
Really a heart touching poem friend. Noticing the word jail i first hesitated to read this poem. but now i feel happy that I read this. Superb!!!!!

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sat Oct 16, 2010 5:37 pm
by shakespear
hello
thnx ur words really encourage persons to write more and more
thnx again
plz make me favor and always show me ur comments
c u and have lovely moments

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:34 pm
by shakespear
hello
this poem reminds me the days in the jail, although they were hateful days but they will stay in mind and won't disappear and i can't forget them. there is always sth which reminds u that.
i wanna just express my feelings.
forgive me

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sun Feb 13, 2011 12:47 pm
by farah
REALLY U WAS IN THE JAIL
OHHHHHHH
U WAS SUFFERING IF U WAS IN THE JAIL

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Tue Feb 15, 2011 4:37 pm
by shakespear
yes i was in it and i suffered from that and i'm still suffering
god save me and all my friends

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Thu Feb 17, 2011 7:17 pm
by manal
woooooooooo,
i thought i read all of ur poems,but i missed this,
how great u r,u convey me in a moment from world to another,thanx.

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sun Feb 20, 2011 7:44 pm
by shakespear
hello
u r welcome and i thnx u 4 these comments , u seem so kind and soft. really i wish u read all my poems and send me ur point of view about my writings. we all learn and learn and one can't stop learing koz that refers to stopping the life and means death....
plz read and send me ur comments
c u

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Feb 21, 2011 5:46 am
by manal
u r welcome,
there is a saying that "the great person is great untill s/he thinks s/he is great",
one has to learn to the last moment of his/her life,u r right,thnx :-D

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Feb 21, 2011 11:30 am
by shakespear
hello
yes u r the person is so great unless that person claims the knowledge, in that moment s/he becomes ignorant and no more educated, koz s/he will stop searching and learning.
really i thought u r so educated and i invite u to try writing poems or short storied koz i think u can
thnx and hope lovely times

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Feb 21, 2011 1:42 pm
by manal
u get the idea,
i thank ur invitation very much ,in fact u r motivating me,thanx.
i like writing poems and stories,but it depends on my mood {-;
i will try to have something new very soon ,and u of course will be the supervisor of me {-;
thanx again for regarding me as an educated person,it means a lot for me,that shakespear says so.

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Feb 21, 2011 3:45 pm
by shakespear
u r welcome and i'll be so happy to be ur helper in writing sth, just start any thing and u'll find urself making something great ...u'll find ur self making great work and u'll be proud of that..i'm sure u can but first put the idea infront of ur face and hold the pen and write what is inside ur deeps then ur pen won't stop .......thnx, u inspired me 2 say these lovely words and advices..
good luck

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Feb 21, 2011 6:15 pm
by manal
hi,
i promise that u will read a new thing by me as soon as possible,and thank u for every thing.
have nice moments.

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Tue Feb 22, 2011 7:34 pm
by shakespear
hello
i tried to write but i can't , i know that i have something to write about but i can't now ...y??????? i don't know y ? may be its koz of not holding the pen. poems inside our souls are like volvano, u can't excite it unless magma and melted things inside it boil, in that time the volcano excite and its magma will flow , our soul is like the volcano and the poems are like this magma so we have not to oblige our selves to write a poem.
thnx and have lovely times

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Wed Feb 23, 2011 6:01 pm
by farah
Hellooooooooo
i read this comment in your new subject with some changs but i think it is good
good luck

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sat Feb 26, 2011 3:17 pm
by shakespear
hello
yes that's right i issued it in separate topic.thnx 4 this soft comment and have nice moments

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Feb 28, 2011 4:25 pm
by farah
HELLO
I WANT TO WRITE SOMETHING BUT I CANNOT PLEASE CAN U HELP ME IN WTITING A POEM?
MY REGARDS AND PLEASE READ MY LETTER IN YOUR BOX IN ENGLISH CLUB AND ANSWER ME.
THANKS

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Wed May 11, 2011 7:53 am
by shakespear
hi
listen
poems can't be written by friends and by helping one another, i know one can help another by encoruging but to teach him how to write a poem , really i don't know
have nice moments

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Thu May 12, 2011 11:49 am
by xtragirl
Hmm.. My comment for now, it's so good and touch my heart..
You know, I feel that I'm in that jail..
Imagine for what I will do..
So far with someone I love..
So sad..

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sat May 14, 2011 6:26 am
by shakespear
hello
thnx .......
really u encouraged me with these lovley words and i hope u send more comments about other poems.......
u seem so good in this comment and i hope u try to write poems or any literatur writing
c u
my best wishes

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Mon Aug 01, 2011 3:06 pm
by Lara
hi :) Shakespear, i already told u i loved this poem. I hope you do not miss this great gift that you have to write poems, and God continue giving you lots of inspiration. Bye

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Fri Aug 05, 2011 7:08 am
by shakespear
hi lara and thnx
so am i
hope not to lose this gift of God...pray 4 me to get inspiration
thanx again

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Tue Jun 11, 2013 12:51 pm
by shakespear
hi all my friends....some thing reminds me this poem...really i like it much....koz its part of my personality...
have lovely time...
c u

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2013 4:02 pm
by Elisa
Have you been in a jail?

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2013 2:01 pm
by shakespear
hi elisa...yeah i entered the jail for about 11 months then i was released , but after that i felt the jail come inside me.....i think u got the meaning....i meant i'm scared now and i fear my shadow...
any way..its now just memory...

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2013 4:34 pm
by Elisa
I am so sorry for you. Fear is a bad beast!

Ciao.

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2013 9:04 pm
by shakespear
thnx 4 ur soft feelings...really i used to fear every thing ...in the street, in the flat, in the scholl, even the bed...its frightful ...some times i awake from sleep and turn my pillow to discover there's nothing...it's tragedy....

where are all my loyal friends...the place seem empty...
why did that happened to this club??
have nice moments

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sat Jun 15, 2013 8:40 am
by Elisa
Rich people use psychotherapy, other people use religion...I prefer a bar of good chocolate :)

But ..tell me...What do you think there could be under the pillow?

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sat Jun 15, 2013 4:13 pm
by shakespear
hi again/

as u said everyone uses sth different to cure self...may b one of us wana escape to uncertain place just to forget the problem....some use religion to dive in worshipping and adoration, to get patience for facing that problem...for me i preter the last one...i mean worshipping...

in that time, i just had got out from my nightmare and i dont know now why i refuged that time to the place under my pillow....may be i was afraid of sth..a bomb or snake or a ghost or some thing else....may be i wanted to become armed against any probable danger so i turned my pollow looking for a gun or a knife or any weapon perhaps i might find there....

these are my thoughts ...may be i'm wrong and i've 2 face my problems once and twice..more and more....till i used to live peacefully....
any way thanks 4 ur interest and hope u nice time....
have nice moments u and all my friends...
good luck

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sat Jun 15, 2013 4:49 pm
by Elisa
I am sorry, you seem so sad.

How can I help you... maybe telling you that under your pillow you can find only your pyjama or some money that the tooth fairy left for you... but probably this cannot cheer you up.

I wish you all the best, ciao.

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Sat Jun 15, 2013 7:03 pm
by shakespear
hahahahah.......thnx ...really u seem so funny...ok real friend who wants to give happines to his/her friends
at least u could make me laugh..
thnx again

Re: Ode from inside a jail

Posted: Thu Jan 07, 2016 5:34 pm
by shakespear
ode from inside a jail....i like this poem...and some other poems i wrote b4