I’m a foreign in my world

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I’m a foreign in my world

Post by Lara » Fri Aug 05, 2011 9:24 pm

I found you in the right moment
When I felt everybody was attaching me
I live in a world where all around me is full of hypocrisy
I don’t know who my friend is really and who my enemy is
I want to escape from that world where I feel as a foreign.
I want to feel protected from people who want I decline
I felt vulnerable when my first pillar disappeared
Now I’m crying, I want everybody leaves me alone
I can’t hear anybody; I don’t know any body here
I’m hurt and I don’t want to hurt anyone
Tell me you what I’m doing wrong; tell me what the right is.

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Re: I’m a foreign in my world

Post by shakespear » Sat Aug 06, 2011 12:12 am

Lara wrote:Tell me you what I’m doing wrong; tell me what the right is.
i like this term
i think u r good poetess
my regards new friend

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Re: I’m a foreign in my world

Post by Lara » Sat Aug 06, 2011 12:34 am

actually i dont think it is a poem, im not a good writing, but thanks :)

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Re: I’m a foreign in my world

Post by shakespear » Sat Aug 06, 2011 2:11 am

hi
i think u have high expressions and valuable idea, lovely meanings
gd lk

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Re: I’m a foreign in my world

Post by Lara » Sat Aug 06, 2011 2:17 am

Thank you!!

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Re: I’m a foreign in my world

Post by sweethuman » Sun Aug 07, 2011 6:08 am

As I read two of your peoms, you seem so much discouraged and unhappy from the worlds and friends etc. Just be happy and enjoy your life.

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Re: I’m a foreign in my world

Post by Lara » Sun Aug 07, 2011 8:30 pm

Thanks a lot :)

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