Our Time

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Our Time

Postby Lara » Tue Sep 13, 2011 10:14 pm

Our Time
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Let’s enjoy our moment, don’t wait for a signal
Time is our enemy; if we wait I’ll lose you
Time is laughing at us, it’ll steal our happiness
Our feelings will be erased from our minds
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I don’t want to wait anymore
Follow me and don’t ask me why?
Give me your hand, don’t be hesitated
Don’t think, just stay here with me

Let’s take pleasure in our love
If you feel love, then, don’t deny
Don’t refuse me, don’t falter
Do not doubt my love for you

Time is against our love, do not delay
Time doesn’t forgive, it won’t forgive us
Do you have another choice? I don’t
Time is going to take our love

I am still here waiting for you
Don’t let me go, I don’t want
Time comes and goes, ours is going
Our love story goes with it

Sky is the witness of my love
It is sad, because our time is gone
My feelings and you went with it
Now you're just a memory no more
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Re: Our Time

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 13, 2011 10:31 pm

Lara wrote:I am still here waiting for you
Don’t let me go, I don’t want
Time comes and goes, ours is going
Our love story goes with it

woooooooow at last its the fantastic poem although it is sad but we have here some thing fantastic..it is piece of high style...the stanza above, my point of view, is the greatest one in the poem..in general, the poem expresses the sadness and melancholy and its regarded one of the greatest poems i've ever read....
i hope in future u keep rhyme and try to poetize with rhyme if u like that and don't feel tired of that
.....good luck and go ahead my friend.....

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Re: Our Time

Postby Lara » Tue Sep 13, 2011 10:42 pm

shakespear wrote:i hope in future u keep rhyme and try to poetize with rhyme if u like that and don't feel tired of that

{-: Shakespear, thanks alot for this comment, thanks for ur friendship, and i promise i will use rhyme(it's hard) hahah :) ... u encourage with every comment of urs :) see you

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Re: Our Time

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 13, 2011 10:48 pm

U R WELCOME ....i'm happy 2 hear that from u and i wish in the next poem i read rhymed poem...
go ahead and don't fear difficult things...burn a candle instead of cursing the darkness....

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Re: Our Time

Postby Lara » Tue Sep 13, 2011 10:50 pm

Thanks for this advise :)

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Re: Our Time

Postby shakespear » Sun Sep 25, 2011 9:11 am

plz we all are waiting another poem so plz hurry up...thnx

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Re: Our Time

Postby Lara » Sun Sep 25, 2011 6:29 pm

Why the hurry? do not be impatient :-)

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Re: Our Time

Postby shakespear » Thu Oct 13, 2011 11:33 pm

Lara wrote:Why the hurry? do not be impatient


mmm i think we have to hurry up koz poems are like springs if u take much water from them they'll flow more and more...so take much from ur mind and don't stint to show ur poems...
have nice moments

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Re: Our Time

Postby Lara » Fri Oct 14, 2011 4:32 am

Well i think im thirsty and i need to drink water from that spring to not to be thirsty anymore.

i wanna show a quote which is written in the Bible and it's similar to what u said:

"but whoever drinks the water I give them will never thirst. Indeed, the water I give them will become in them a spring of water welling up to eternal life.” John 4:14

Hope u like it!

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Re: Our Time

Postby tandvictor » Sat Oct 15, 2011 3:27 pm

is it poem in this section?...oh that's a pity i don't know really poems in english...i mean how to do it!!!

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Re: Our Time

Postby Lara » Sat Oct 15, 2011 6:18 pm

Hello tandvictor nice to meet u, well i think u can, dont say no, u just have to use ur imagination and to be inspired by anything...also u can comments poems here. hope u enjoy this site, see you friend

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Re: Our Time

Postby shakespear » Sun Oct 16, 2011 11:40 am

hi friends
have nice moments


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