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Re: WE

Postby shakespear » Sun Nov 20, 2011 12:44 am

hello elisa
i meant move one...move us ...move me to the place of event...that means ur poem is like a movie we can see the events through this movie...when u say a poem u make us see the events...u move us to the place of event...this is my intention...
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Re: WE

Postby Elisa » Sun Nov 20, 2011 1:23 pm

Thanks, I will try.
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Re: WE

Postby Elisa » Mon Nov 21, 2011 7:01 pm

WE (2)

No words
No place

Me
You

Everywhere
In my mind
In your eyes

Forever

Never more.


You can free your feelings and give the sense you need.
Am I too hermetic?

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Re: WE

Postby shakespear » Sat Nov 26, 2011 3:40 am

hi
u wana make the imgination free for us and we can imgaine wtever we want...u r like painter who puts just little on the picture and lets the seers imagine the rest of the picture...any way its good idea to release our minds into the deserts of soul...
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Re: WE

Postby Elisa » Sat Nov 26, 2011 7:56 am

Thanks for your comment Shak. I liked your comparison of my poem with a minimalist painting.
When I write I don't think, I just do it and this is the result.

To be hermetic is not a choice but a status.
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Re: WE

Postby shakespear » Sun Nov 27, 2011 7:29 am

hi
u r welcome
i wish u can write long poem with rhyme.... i wana u just try and if u can't its ok...ur short lines r good too
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