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BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2011 6:11 am
by shakespear
BETWEEN ME AND HER

I:
I always think I can leave
But I didn’t try it before
You're my candle, now I believe
Without you, my heart is sore
**********************
She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away
**********************
I:
Don’t hate me I can't bear it
I know your heart's often sad
For me, I think you're so fit
You're an angel, but I'm bad
**********************
She:
in my heart, you stabbed your knife
On my back, is still its bunch
I hate you but I'll hate life
And my heart bleeds so much
**********************
I:
I'm Punic, you're queen Didon
In my heart, you had a throne
And all things sweet you'd done
Don’t leave me in world alone
But you, I have got no one
In my life, the sun's shone
**********************
She:
I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen
**********************

at last i could finish it...alhamdulilah that i finished it koz i was suffering ...have nice moments

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2011 6:42 pm
by sweets
dear friend
I'm so happy that you finished it you're better than me i did not finish till now .......


i like your conversation so much but i did not find the end is it endless story????????? tell me plz.

i'll send m poetic comment sooooon

takeare

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2011 11:40 pm
by shakespear
hi friend
i couldn't add more koz i hoped to finish it in any way so its not short although its end not witty but it's ok...thnx 4 ur comment and i hope u finish ur poem soon...
regards

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Fri Dec 16, 2011 6:15 pm
by sweets
honestly

i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Fri Dec 16, 2011 10:58 pm
by shakespear
sweets wrote:honestly

i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad
i don't think so u r like spring and it won't be dry and will still flow with clear water and u said this term b4 but u wrote many after that so don't be despaired koz all of us live in languor like urs but we passed it and u was one of us and u passed it b4 so hurry and hold ur pen and write whatever u get in ur mind.....i hope u can do it koz u r one of the motives, impulses in this club...
my best wishes...

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Fri Dec 16, 2011 11:08 pm
by Lara
Hello Shakes, it's nice to see a different poem :-D

shakespear wrote:I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate

I try to hide but its seen


Well we cant hide love we feel to the otherone, but it seems the time they met wasnt the right one, they love each other, but cant be together, it's my impression, am i right? :roll:

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Fri Dec 16, 2011 11:55 pm
by shakespear
shakespear wrote:She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away

i think she is more loyal than him ...she is ready to fall down for his sake although he loyal too but she is more...
and as u said
Lara wrote:it seems the time they met wasnt the right one, they love each other, but cant be together
i think u r r8 and u r excellent in this comment...i like this impression
thnx and go ahead and let us hear sth from u...
regards

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sat Dec 17, 2011 12:26 am
by Lara
Thanks Shakes
I hope so :-D

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sat Dec 17, 2011 1:21 am
by shakespear
u r welcome friend...
have nice time

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sat Dec 17, 2011 7:22 am
by sweets
shakespear wrote:
sweets wrote:honestly

i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad
i don't think so u r like spring and it won't be dry and will still flow with clear water and u said this term b4 but u wrote many after that so don't be despaired koz all of us live in languor like urs but we passed it and u was one of us and u passed it b4 so hurry and hold ur pen and write whatever u get in ur mind.....i hope u can do it koz u r one of the motives, impulses in this club...
my best wishes...

thanx for cheering up friend but when heart is lost ..when mind is busy..when soul is missed when you feel that time is running and you can not catch it how can i hold my pen again ??!!!!

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sun Dec 18, 2011 8:57 am
by shakespear
sweets wrote:thanx for cheering up friend but when heart is lost ..when mind is busy..when soul is missed when you feel that time is running and you can not catch it how can i hold my pen again ??!!!!
waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw this term is intrinsically, in its self considerd as lovely poem...u r kidding when u say u have lost ability to write poetry koz the term u wrote is a great evidence that u can write a poem easily...i wish i said this term or i thought in this term ..and i'll make it lovely poem...u have to try this term and decorate it to create from it lovely poem...i wish i have ur ability to imagine things in lovely sights like u...u r the best if u try hard and try ur best...u can make things from nothing...think of my speech and u'll find ur way to write and create..
best wishes friend

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sun Dec 18, 2011 7:08 pm
by sweets
shakespear wrote:
sweets wrote:thanx for cheering up friend but when heart is lost ..when mind is busy..when soul is missed when you feel that time is running and you can not catch it how can i hold my pen again ??!!!!
waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw this term is intrinsically, in its self considerd as lovely poem...u r kidding when u say u have lost ability to write poetry koz the term u wrote is a great evidence that u can write a poem easily...i wish i said this term or i thought in this term ..and i'll make it lovely poem...u have to try this term and decorate it to create from it lovely poem...i wish i have ur ability to imagine things in lovely sights like u...u r the best if u try hard and try ur best...u can make things from nothing...think of my speech and u'll find ur way to write and create..
best wishes friend

so ur insisting on to write and create maybe i should try let me see ..think and create newthing
thanx for supporting friend

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2011 4:13 am
by shakespear
sweets wrote:so ur insisting on to write and create maybe i should try let me see
yeah i think the 1st step to write ...if u have time and wish to write so u can do it...koz if u don't have desire to that u can't write a letter and i wana u think and try...
i'll be waiting for u ...
regards

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2011 5:43 am
by sweets
what's really killing me that nothing deserve to write about ...everything around me is big illusion people are turning to machines ..kids without any innocence..every thing is depending on (give & take) so if you have nothing to give you can not touch anything ...........so come on wat shall i write about ..about fake love or imaginative perfect world .....lost paradise or how people are living in peace and happiness !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

just tell me koz i'm lossing my mind

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2011 7:49 am
by shakespear
doesn't sun shin in ur country...can't u see it every day...is there a moon in the sky during nights..stars...butterfly...do u still have imagination about innocence and kind, merciful mothers and fathers...can't u imagine severe love and soft one...can't u write about violence towards ppl all over the world....
i think there r lots of images and u can catch some of them and paint a lovely picture
regards

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sat Feb 04, 2012 11:21 am
by farah
NEW POEM I DID NOT READ IT BEFORE

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sun Feb 05, 2012 10:50 am
by shakespear
farah wrote:NEW POEM I DID NOT READ IT BEFORE
enjoy reading it plz...
have nice moments

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2012 7:54 am
by shakespear
sweets wrote:what's really killing me that nothing deserve to write about ...everything around me is big illusion people are turning to machines ..kids without any innocence..every thing is depending on (give & take) so if you have nothing to give you can not touch anything ...........so come on wat shall i write about ..about fake love or imaginative perfect world .....lost paradise or how people are living in peace and happiness !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

just tell me koz i'm lossing my mind
shakespear wrote:doesn't sun shin in ur country...can't u see it every day...is there a moon in the sky during nights..stars...butterfly...do u still have imagination about innocence and kind, merciful mothers and fathers...can't u imagine severe love and soft one...can't u write about violence towards ppl all over the world....
i think there r lots of images and u can catch some of them and paint a lovely picture
regards
so did u think about my view...about my speech...many things in this world deserve to write about....dont they???

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sat Jun 22, 2013 7:11 pm
by shakespear
BETWEEN ME AND HER

I:
I always think I can leave
But I didn’t try it before
You're my candle, now I believe
Without you, my heart is sore
**********************
She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away
**********************
I:
Don’t hate me I can't bear it
I know your heart's often sad
For me, I think you're so fit
You're an angel, but I'm bad
**********************
She:
in my heart, you stabbed your knife
On my back, is still its bunch
I hate you but I'll hate life
And my heart bleeds so much
**********************
I:
I'm Punic, you're queen Didon
In my heart, you had a throne
And all things sweet you'd done
Don’t leave me in world alone
But you, I have got no one
In my life, the sun's shone
**********************
She:
I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen



i wrote it as a dialogue between me and her....so every one has his own explanation....

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Sun Nov 10, 2013 8:04 pm
by dreamer
"I loved you but I was late"

i guess she is still thinking it's too late

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Mon Nov 11, 2013 7:01 pm
by shakespear
hi...
there's still glimpse of hope that u come here and send a comment...i'm happy...
listen i remembered a poem from u or may be its an idea from u about that woman who is waiting in a railway station...waiting her lover but in vain...
u promised to try writing a poem...and till now we see nothing...
i hope u r trying now...
have nice moments

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Thu Nov 14, 2013 10:55 am
by dreamer
when words die in lips why pen should speak??

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Tue Feb 25, 2014 12:42 pm
by shakespear
yes dreamer u can write excellent poem

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Wed Mar 05, 2014 4:23 pm
by dreamer
between u and me words are not nothing just let our eyes talk
between u and me many feelings are on crash
anger ..happy ...mad or in love

between u and me .........let's live our dream

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Wed Mar 26, 2014 10:39 am
by shakespear
hi at last i can open my account after long time of trying to enter ...any way i'm sorry 4 my delay and now i want to issue a new poem and hope that all my friends here can show me my mistakes so i apologize in advance about any mistake
see u soon

Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Posted: Fri Sep 15, 2017 9:10 am
by shakespear
RENEW OLD POEMS