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broken mirror

Postby sweets » Sat Dec 24, 2011 6:25 am

(Shakespeare always asks me to hold a pen as first step .....so this is what i got)

what to say ..what to write ..what to tell ...

i lose the whole sense !!!!! sense of life ...time ...passion

people say I'm cold like ice how can i deny!!! but they do not know why ...
just wanna talk talk and talk......just talk

my soul is like broken mirror how to collect...my heart is broken how to mend ...my body is tired how o rest............

they are here just to watch without support no one mend or even try to collect they just wanna the end ......... waiting that ice to melt and catch the gift !!!!

who I'm i asked myself once ???? am i a butterfly flying next light waiting to die or like a tree in storm refusing the death??????


[color=#BF4080]who I'm ???am i that passion lover who ready to give everything??? or playful one who likes to hurt all burn all likes revenge??????????
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what to say...what to tell.......

I live puzzle and can't find the end !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Re: broken mirror

Postby shakespear » Sun Dec 25, 2011 3:41 am

hi
although ur writing is prose, not metrical, but i think it touches the heart and it so nice....it enters the hearts without asking permission koz it flows from inside ur heart.....i can't say anything more koz i have no words to come close to ur great expressions and ur fantastic words........if u just say the title .......i think it's enough to be a good work.......so i think u have the ability to write great writing easily.....
my regards....

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Re: broken mirror

Postby sweets » Sun Dec 25, 2011 6:19 am

so no grammatical mistakes !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hoooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry

happy that u like it

have a sweet day

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Re: broken mirror

Postby shakespear » Mon Dec 26, 2011 4:29 am

طبع الكرى فوق الجفون ذبولا فاراك منها صارما مسلولا
تهوى الوصال وقد تريك تمنعا فاسلك لقلب الفاتنات سبيلا
ان الهوى صعب وان مارسته مارست فيه الضم والتقبيلا
its in arabic and i know u'll understand it.....thnx

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Re: broken mirror

Postby sweets » Mon Dec 26, 2011 7:02 am

no comment and i'm sure u know why

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Re: broken mirror

Postby shakespear » Mon Jan 30, 2012 8:59 pm

hello........
i don't know
i tried to understand my self but i think its so hard so how can i understand the ppl round me...its more diffuclt
broken mirror...represents our tired souls which can't reflect wt we face in this world
i d k

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Re: broken mirror

Postby momalanmol » Thu Apr 09, 2015 6:20 am

what can i say only you are very good , frankly you are playing by words readily, and the best thing i like in this poem rich vocabulary , i was useful about it and i have found stiffness to understand this poem Coz you put difficult words for me, but that good to give me ability to improve my english and try to develop it.
i'll say it agian it's wonderful poem and i hope to you all best and all wishes.
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Re: broken mirror

Postby dreamer » Sun Apr 19, 2015 10:06 am

thanx momalanmol


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