Wounded Sky

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Wounded Sky

Postby Lara » Fri Apr 27, 2012 9:36 pm

Wounded Sky

Blood flows in the Earth
His heart has been hurt
Sky, the only witness
Tears are falling from the sky

♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫
Nobody listens to his voice
It’s as high that can’t be heard
Madness, hatred weaken him
Tears are falling from the sky

♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫
Love and confidence are fading
His wounds are larger
He can’t stand it anymore
Tears are falling from the sky

♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫♫
His screaming is like thunders
Human doesn't see his wounds
People don’t stop his crying
They won’t see a rainbow in the sky.



[Sorry if i have grammar mistakes :-D ]

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Re: Wounded Sky

Postby shakespear » Fri Jun 08, 2012 9:53 pm

hi....i'm so sorry koz i wasn't here...really the title took my attention so i read it...
i noticed that the first three stanzas ends with the same term:Tears are falling from the sky , but the last stanza didn't end with the same term...
i think the poem is as a lovely picture which shows us the suffering of someone and none with him to relieve him or comfort him although there are some mistakes in grammar and expression but it's still a wonderful picture painted by soft fingers of soft painter
excuse me for this long comment and have nice moments

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Re: Wounded Sky

Postby Lara » Sat Aug 04, 2012 3:46 pm

Thanks for your comment!!!

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Re: Wounded Sky

Postby shakespear » Sat Aug 18, 2012 8:32 am

Lara wrote:His screaming is like thunders


look at this line , his screaming is like thunder,
i think if u said: his screaming is unheard
may be it'd be better...i don't know, but i think so...every time we discover new thing..
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