Not being a native English speaker I'll always need an advice when it comes to tricky or fine expressions.
Here I'm writing a song about a traveling guy who gives a promise having the best intentions, but his way of life doesn't allow him to keep his word. So I've come to an expression "...words written in the sand...", but that has more syllables than the music length, so I hesitate between these two replacements: "[...words left in the sand...]" or "[...just words in the sand...]".
Here the lines:
"I'll come again"...
"I won't forget"...
...words left in the sand...
[...just words in the sand...]
They both match well the music length but to me the first one seems better. Any opinion?
Thanks a lot and best vibes.