A ROSE & A HELL

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when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile

when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u
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i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
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urs
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come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page
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i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty
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no more u win this time
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in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly


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Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

Thanks. I wait your coment.
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farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?
hello farah:
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?

really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
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hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:

you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...

i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
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Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
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shakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON
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farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :
do i only feel sad ?
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shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?
mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.

hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............
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Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning
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if ur online just start ur lines
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Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?
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i mean let's play our game
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Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?
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no wrods to say
no lyrics to sing
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No words to say
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all
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no words to say
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

what do you think about
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Hello
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea
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dreamer wrote:no words to say
no games to play
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play
hi farah:
did u mean these 2 lines?? ok may be u r r8 but the poet can do what others can't..this called in literature" poetic license" ...any way it's ur opinioin
but my opinion is: we have to write and write whatever comes to our mind...we have to translate our ideas to lines of poems...and show the other what we want to say in poetic writing...
dear friend dreamer:
i think u r able to write wtever u want...u can make all ur speech poetry... really i think u r the best in this club....koz u have soft sense
finally: thanks farah to show ur comment frankly
........... thanks dreamer to accept all opinion and comments
.......... thanks all my friends in this club to edure my long comments


all have nice moments.........warm kisses
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Waw.. How can this happen? If you agree I am not agree. But thank you to teach us the term(poetic licens) SHKIE... Have sweet dream my s......... FRIEND
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well it's not a matter to agree or not it's just we post what's going in ur mind at this moment

u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah


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Hi farsh.. We all respect ur opinion but in return we wish others respect our opinions,
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day
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Hi shakie... Thank you... I respect your opinion...bye my lovely friends
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Hi farah.. Thnx
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...
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it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search
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Wooow still remmber ur role well let me think about something
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as u like but i like to hear and read from u new poem
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shakespear wrote:A ROSE & A HELL

Who listens to infants or cares for plants?
Who defends them, defends their sad mothers?
Who feels for them, feels for the tearful chants?
All denied, you have no friends, no brothers
………………………………………………………………………. (1)
Who will say " HAPPY RETURNS" again?
Who will give us cards and sweets at Bairam?
Who will wipe puzzled tears, and erase sore pain?
We all please the hope, cling to a fine tram
………………………………………………………………………. (2)
Clashes and shelling, are all day and night
Scattered limbs are spread so high in the sky
The mothers are still waiting for the knight
The saver will come and erase the sigh
………………………………………………………………………. (3)
Moving from place to place, I try to escape
During the night's silence, dull hours pass
And other foul bombs break the calm, and rape..
Our quiet, our souls, and kill the so fair lass
………………………………………………………………………. (4)
A grisly tyrant became our bad fate
Allied with Satan to kill more and more
He's thirsty to blood and he wants to sate
Who stops him? our happy life turned sore
………………………………………………………………………. (5)
An awful missile fell on my garden
Ruined my white flowers, destroyed the beauty
Broke the green branches, it aims to sadden
Happy beings, really you're so potty
………………………………………………………………………. (6)
Under the debris, I found a soft rose
It was still dewy, It was still alive
My lass, I need you to revive and dose..
The rose, what a pity! the charm will rive
………………………………………………………………………. (7)
When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
………………………………………………………………………. (8)


i hope you enjoy reading my new poem
have nice moments
what line u like in this poem????
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Whole stanza number 4
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koz it represents wt u lived in fact...r8???
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So right
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i supposed that....read it again and show me my mistakes please
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RENEW OLD POEMS
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