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hi
icant go on kox now my heart feels sad...y i feel ur tears rising in ur eyes, r they?
y i cause sadness 2 u & 2 myslf...u won in the poem....i wana u win....koz i u & u me , its mess

it's not a battle to have winner in

i just wanna re-live my talent as we were remmber shaki?? those sweet mad days

sorry if i hurt u but as u said iu & u me

Is it hard 2 find kind heart now a days? 4 me its not koz i hv my dearest & u kno that

it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search

God granted me so sweet , educated ..sweets & that's enough.

don't make her shy that little girl is vanishing

If she vanishing, im vanishing 2.... U kno, she's full of sweets

sweetness is'nt work nowaday the curle is winner at this time

Sweets may be an adjective or a name, u got it?

cu around busy man
and think of new line to start our game

I use mobile with hacking so its weak...nothing make me busy on u

u become hacker tooo!!!!!!!!!

Just 2 get net...noth else

start with this word:
when....
when can my cheek lay on ur cheek?
when can my lips touch ur lips?
when can my hand confound in ur hair?
comb it and temper ur neck?
is it possible or it's no way?

ur turn

when sun meet moon
when we meet
i'm in to u

when can i meet u, and look into ur eyes?
when can i take u, and take u to my chest?
when can my chest touch urs? feel ur heat?
when my hopes come true and live in ur paradise?
million " when" but none can be fact...

ur turn

when millions be true
when all starts be 4 u
when i can say i luv u?

when will the bright star visit me?
when will my lover mercy my heart?
when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?

ur turn

shakespear wrote:when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?

I like these two lines. What did you mean with these two lines??
Please check your inbox.
I am waiting.
Good night.

mmm ok listen;
florid tree refers to fortile female, when delicious fruit refers to sin or refers to forbidden fruit of Adam in paradise...when he eats that fruit feels of his nakedness..i think u know the tale...
thnx 4 ur comment and i'll check my inbox..
gd nyt

when i be u
when smiles be true
and life combain us too

i think it's " combine" my teacher...don't worry i got it...
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?

good morning all my friends

when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile

when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u

i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs

come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page

i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty

no more u win this time

in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly


thnx

Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

Thanks. I wait your coment.

farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

hello farah:
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?

really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
have nice moments.

hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:

you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...

i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..

Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines

shakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines

really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON

farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem

ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :
do i only feel sad ?
have nice moments...

shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?

mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.

hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............

Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning

if ur online just start ur lines

Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?

i mean let's play our game

Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?

no wrods to say
no lyrics to sing

No words to say
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all

no words to say
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

what do you think about

Hello
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea

dreamer wrote:no words to say
no games to play
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

hi farah:
did u mean these 2 lines?? ok may be u r r8 but the poet can do what others can't..this called in literature" poetic license" ...any way it's ur opinioin
but my opinion is: we have to write and write whatever comes to our mind...we have to translate our ideas to lines of poems...and show the other what we want to say in poetic writing...
dear friend dreamer:
i think u r able to write wtever u want...u can make all ur speech poetry... really i think u r the best in this club....koz u have soft sense
finally: thanks farah to show ur comment frankly
........... thanks dreamer to accept all opinion and comments
.......... thanks all my friends in this club to edure my long comments


all have nice moments.........warm kisses

Waw.. How can this happen? If you agree I am not agree. But thank you to teach us the term(poetic licens) SHKIE... Have sweet dream my s......... FRIEND

well it's not a matter to agree or not it's just we post what's going in ur mind at this moment

u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah


cu around and waiting to share us in our game

Hi farsh.. We all respect ur opinion but in return we wish others respect our opinions,
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day

Hi shakie... Thank you... I respect your opinion...bye my lovely friends

Hi farah.. Thnx
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...