A ROSE & A HELL

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:31 pm

I use mobile with hacking so its weak...nothing make me busy on u
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:37 pm

u become hacker tooo!!!!!!!!!

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:44 pm

Just 2 get net...noth else
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 16, 2014 7:41 am

start with this word:
when....
when can my cheek lay on ur cheek?
when can my lips touch ur lips?
when can my hand confound in ur hair?
comb it and temper ur neck?
is it possible or it's no way?

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Wed Apr 16, 2014 2:50 pm

when sun meet moon
when we meet
i'm in to u

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 16, 2014 4:32 pm

when can i meet u, and look into ur eyes?
when can i take u, and take u to my chest?
when can my chest touch urs? feel ur heat?
when my hopes come true and live in ur paradise?
million " when" but none can be fact...

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Wed Apr 16, 2014 6:04 pm

when millions be true
when all starts be 4 u
when i can say i luv u?

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 16, 2014 6:31 pm

when will the bright star visit me?
when will my lover mercy my heart?
when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Wed Apr 16, 2014 9:25 pm

shakespear wrote:when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?


I like these two lines. What did you mean with these two lines??
Please check your inbox.
I am waiting.
Good night.
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 16, 2014 9:49 pm

mmm ok listen;
florid tree refers to fortile female, when delicious fruit refers to sin or refers to forbidden fruit of Adam in paradise...when he eats that fruit feels of his nakedness..i think u know the tale...
thnx 4 ur comment and i'll check my inbox..
gd nyt
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:30 am

when i be u
when smiles be true
and life combain us too

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:58 am

i think it's " combine" my teacher...don't worry i got it...
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:41 pm

when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile

when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 8:42 pm

i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:06 pm

come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:18 pm

i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:31 pm

no more u win this time

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:43 pm

in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly


thnx
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Fri Apr 18, 2014 4:26 pm

Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

Thanks. I wait your coment.
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Sat Apr 19, 2014 12:51 pm

farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?


hello farah:
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?

really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
have nice moments.
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Sun Apr 27, 2014 12:22 pm

hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:

you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...

i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
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