A ROSE & A HELL

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Sun Apr 27, 2014 12:22 pm

hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:

you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...

i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
we have to live our life freely

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Mon Apr 28, 2014 10:57 am

Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Fri May 02, 2014 8:37 pm

shakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines


really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Fri May 02, 2014 9:04 pm

farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem

ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :
do i only feel sad ?
have nice moments...
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Fri May 02, 2014 9:43 pm

shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?


mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.

hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Sat May 03, 2014 2:33 pm

Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Mon May 05, 2014 8:19 am

if ur online just start ur lines

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Mon May 05, 2014 9:16 am

Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Tue May 06, 2014 11:55 am

i mean let's play our game

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Tue May 06, 2014 12:42 pm

Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Wed May 07, 2014 7:04 am

no wrods to say
no lyrics to sing

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Wed May 07, 2014 7:56 am

No words to say
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Wed May 07, 2014 10:20 am

no words to say
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

what do you think about

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Wed May 07, 2014 5:18 pm

Hello
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu May 08, 2014 7:13 am

dreamer wrote:no words to say
no games to play
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

hi farah:
did u mean these 2 lines?? ok may be u r r8 but the poet can do what others can't..this called in literature" poetic license" ...any way it's ur opinioin
but my opinion is: we have to write and write whatever comes to our mind...we have to translate our ideas to lines of poems...and show the other what we want to say in poetic writing...
dear friend dreamer:
i think u r able to write wtever u want...u can make all ur speech poetry... really i think u r the best in this club....koz u have soft sense
finally: thanks farah to show ur comment frankly
........... thanks dreamer to accept all opinion and comments
.......... thanks all my friends in this club to edure my long comments


all have nice moments.........warm kisses
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Thu May 08, 2014 9:25 pm

Waw.. How can this happen? If you agree I am not agree. But thank you to teach us the term(poetic licens) SHKIE... Have sweet dream my s......... FRIEND
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Fri May 09, 2014 7:58 am

well it's not a matter to agree or not it's just we post what's going in ur mind at this moment

u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah


cu around and waiting to share us in our game

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Fri May 09, 2014 5:32 pm

Hi farsh.. We all respect ur opinion but in return we wish others respect our opinions,
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Mon May 12, 2014 10:45 am

Hi shakie... Thank you... I respect your opinion...bye my lovely friends
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Sun May 25, 2014 7:34 am

Hi farah.. Thnx
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...
our life is like a night mare

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby Olagora » Thu Apr 09, 2015 5:42 am

it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search


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