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if you like to complete

Post by shakespear » Wed Jan 13, 2016 11:11 am

we start this poetry, each one has his role:

she:
look at me and tell me am i you

i:
i don't know you, so don't ask me who?
you are sad like me, so i don't like to see
we're two souls in one body will be
or two wings of one bird flying high
in a vast sky, you, with me, tie

she:
No ties no vows you wont regret
Iam like ashes ready to hit
Stay away dont forget
Im your dankness your mess
Stay away dont get in

i:
i'll stay out not to make sin
you fill my ears with din
like smoke i can enter everywhere
and travel during future
my heart once told me about her
don't love, you'll torture

if you like to complete please feel free
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Re: if you like to complete

Post by dreamer » Wed Jan 13, 2016 12:03 pm

i:
listen to your heart dear
life is full with these
look here look there you'll see
life is not smoke not din

don't look to past even in dreams
you still have hope so carry the beams
light your life your soul
light it maybe you light my seeds
be urself

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Re: if you like to complete

Post by shakespear » Wed Jan 13, 2016 1:01 pm

my heart dies when we meet
and i can't walk, move my feet
touch my chest and sense my pulse
you'll feel something else
don't cry for me or be sad
you're worse, your state is bad
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Re: if you like to complete

Post by dreamer » Wed Jan 13, 2016 3:31 pm

I touch your chest l sense your plus
I feel something else
I find shiny dreams with little smiles
Shy tears unspoken eyes
Tell me who were you are
be urself

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Re: if you like to complete

Post by shakespear » Thu Jan 14, 2016 5:33 pm

dreamer wrote:Tell me who were you are
how did u use 2 auxiliaries in this sentence, i couldn't understand it because of this...i couldn't name it as grammatical mistake ...but i thought it was a mistake...may be u have another purpose using this form....so plz explain it
2nd : i dont feel wishing to write lines of poetry...i don't know Y....u'r psychologist and can analyse my state..... :-(
all friends have nice moments...
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Re: if you like to complete

Post by dreamer » Fri Jan 15, 2016 10:23 am

well about grammar u know i hate it so much cuz it ties me
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Re: if you like to complete

Post by shakespear » Fri Jan 15, 2016 11:23 am

freedom doesn't mean leaving grammar or writing wrong terms...we've to follow grammar to write correct sentences....e.g: i saw he....here we have to use him instead of he koz it is object here....and so on>>>>
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Re: if you like to complete

Post by dreamer » Fri Jan 15, 2016 12:36 pm

ok :(
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Post by shakespear » Fri Jan 15, 2016 12:57 pm

just ok..................waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw
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Re: if you like to complete

Post by dreamer » Fri Jan 15, 2016 2:17 pm

because i have nothing else to say
be urself

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