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i want help please {:

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hello :
i wrote a poem and i want to display it in a journal but thay refuse it because i didn't wrote it by the right way >>.
so i want your help to tel me what is the elements ( ways ) for write a poem .
please replay to me i need this help {-: .
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So, you had written a poem and the editor refused to publish it in the journal telling you that you hadn't written it the right way.
And now you want someone tell you how to write a poem.

Ok, poem is a piece of writing in which the words are arranged in separate lines, often having its last sound that reminds the reader to last sound of either the previous or the second last or other last sound of some other line in the same stanza of which the verse was to have been made up.

It isn't easy job to do and what is worse the piece of writing must be considered unique by the editor if you wanted him to publish it in his journal. Owing to the fact that the editors are usually ill-tempered persons :lol: you must find another solution like write the poem down on some forum.;-) :-D
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you right but i need the steps to how to write apoem .......
look i will put it down here and you'll see what is the wrong ok
thank you (:
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Since I came here in the earth
I'm hearing a sweet name in my ear
I thought he is some one who looks for praise
So I always thinking out who does care

I grow up and you know we go to school
The teacher taught us about a man
He said who was hungry in freezing cool
As he was inviting people for "iman"

He add who was worshiping in the night
He apostrophize and wait rise of the light
He came in peaceful not in fight
But people hit him and say him fleer

He said he was friendly with his friends
With child he was merciful and he was pure
He is faithful and truthful . he was wise
His modesty makes him the "islam" cure

I thought : I knew this man in the past
So I still remember who can be
By my brain I blow away but in the last
I found the answer some wear there

Then suddenly I stand up out of my chair
Since I remembered some thing I said
I said the man was normal and who does care
So the forsrestallment came upon , upon my heart

With hesitation I asked him who is he
He said he is the prophet , don't you know him
I said yes so till me what was his name
He said " prophet mohammad peace be upon him

The End
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Nice try.

In addition I want to tell you
that I am sorry for I can't help you about the poem.
The job is over my possibilities.
Also every poet should have freedom in choosing his own way.
With time you will find your and at lenght you will be satiesfied
with the poems you've been writing down.
Be patient and you will be saved.
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thank you so much (:
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You're welcome. :-)
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