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Message in a Passport

Posted: Mon Dec 10, 2012 6:15 pm
by Brahman
I find that the following message is not grammatically perfect. Do you agree?

"This passport contains a chip and antenna embedded in the data page. In addition to the normal care and respect accorded to a passport, BioPass holders are advised to treat the BioPass with due care like any portable electronic device i.e. by ensuring that it does not become wet, bent or mutilated."

My issues are with those phrases that I have underlined:

1. As "chip and antenna" is not a common expression like "bread and butter", "fish and chips" and "bacon and eggs", it should have been "a chip and an antenna". (What do think?)

2. I find "to accord respect" to a passport rather uncanny.

3. The "due care like any portable electronic device" phrase does not sound right but I cannot say why.

4. Personally, I should have written ",i.e.,".

5. The "bent or mutilated" phrase too does not, to my mind, sound grammatical but I cannot say why.

Am I right? I should appreciate your views.

Re: Message in a Passport

Posted: Tue Dec 11, 2012 11:41 pm
by Brahman
Can someone help me with this?