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Text for promotional video

Postby dado » Fri Jul 04, 2014 10:24 am

This is the text for my promotional video. Could you please check for grammatical mistakes please.
We all know that planet Earth has become a global village because of the internet.
Imagine a place, just one specific place online, which is good enough to gather pigeon breeders and pigeon fanciers from all over the world.
We’ve created that place.


We’ve spent hours of communicating with breeders just to understand their needs, their wishes, their situation. Our goal was to satisfy people’s needs, to make it as simple as possible but at the same time powerful and modern. I must say... we’ve succeeded.

Keeping records of all your data online and accessing it at anytime from anywhere. Communicate with other pigeon breeders through messages. Sell your pigeons or buy them from someone else through auctions and ads. Find your lost pigeon or give back the stray one to it’s owner. Keep track of the race by creating racing tables. Create list of your pigeons, couples, broods, young pigeons. Create pedigrees and hatching diaries. Write down your own achievements and results from competitions and even do it for every single of your pigeons.


Everything you will ever need just in one place.
It’s new… different approach in world of pigeon breeding and racing.
It will change that world.

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Re: Text for promotional video

Postby untaught » Fri Aug 01, 2014 1:05 am

"...because of the Internet..."


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