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shayks
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will that might save you

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Hi,
I'm writing a song and these are two lines i jotted down:

A classy look to the opposite direction
will that just might save you from jumping on board?

and I wonder if the second sentence is correct? What I mean is to ask a rhetorical question, if the girl that looked in the other direction thinks that this action will prevent her from falling to the guy's charm ("jumping on board").

Thanks!
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Re: will that might save you

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It sounds grammatically incorrect (Will it...might) because:
Will it ____? is a question.
-and-
It might ______. is a statement.

So, here is an easy fix that still keeps your meaning: "Well, that just might save you..." Almost the same word, but now it's a statement rather than a question.

If you really need a question, then you could try: "You think it'll save you...?" Hope that helps :)
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