check my sentence is right or wrong
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- korishivu
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check my sentence is right or wrong
One day, I was coming from the office, I was walking on the street slowly. The street was full of vehicles and people. People were looking sad and tired. I was looking tired.
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Re: check my sentence is right or wrong
In the first sentence you could use ‘and’ so as to avoid repetition of ‘I’.
E.g.,
One day I came from the office and, slowly, walked down the street. There were lot of cars and people. Everyone looked sad and tired. I was feeling tired myself.
Or,
Coming from the office one day, I walked slowly down the street. There were lot of pedestrians and traffic was heavy. People looked sad and tired and I have to say I was feeling the same.
If you would like to learn more on how to arrange words to form a good sentence follow this link:
http://findingsynonyms.blogspot.com/201 ... yntax.html
E.g.,
One day I came from the office and, slowly, walked down the street. There were lot of cars and people. Everyone looked sad and tired. I was feeling tired myself.
Or,
Coming from the office one day, I walked slowly down the street. There were lot of pedestrians and traffic was heavy. People looked sad and tired and I have to say I was feeling the same.
If you would like to learn more on how to arrange words to form a good sentence follow this link:
http://findingsynonyms.blogspot.com/201 ... yntax.html
- abuwasfa
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Re: check my sentence is right or wrong
i hope this will never happen in reality