Dear friends/teachers,
Is the following paragraph grammatically correct?
As far as I am concerned, regarding all the privileged aspects of people's significant role, one would make a valid point to state that a combined program in which both financially powerful people and the government should provide conditions in the society by which poor people can enjoy a more splendid life.
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Checking a paragraph
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Re: Checking a paragraph
I don't fully understand your para but I can make the following suggestions (in CAPITALS):
As far as I am concerned, regarding all the privileged aspects of people's significant role, one would make a valid point to state that a combined program in which both financially powerful people and the government should provide conditions in [THE - delete] society by which poor people can enjoy a BETTER LIFE.
You are stating that...
a combined program in which both financially powerful people and the government should provide conditions in [THE - delete] society by which poor people can enjoy a BETTER LIFE
but there is no verb to follow your subject. Impossible.
As far as I am concerned, regarding all the privileged aspects of people's significant role, one would make a valid point to state that a combined program in which both financially powerful people and the government should provide conditions in [THE - delete] society by which poor people can enjoy a BETTER LIFE.
You are stating that...
a combined program in which both financially powerful people and the government should provide conditions in [THE - delete] society by which poor people can enjoy a BETTER LIFE
but there is no verb to follow your subject. Impossible.
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