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Resume 1 page review

Post by NeoGamaes » Tue Apr 30, 2019 11:47 am

Hello English expert,

I am targeting a job in USA but I am still not sure my resume is without mistake. Is any of you OK to have a look on it? It's quite brief with only few sentences. I would appreciate a lot...

Resume link: https://www.dropbox.com/s/jhu9rzonr1cku ... g.pdf?dl=0

Thanks for your help!!

Anthony

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Re: Resume 1 page review

Post by Joe » Wed May 01, 2019 1:45 am

Thermal and fluidic engineer

Are you sure this is correct?

thermal = adjective
fluidic = adjective

But to my ear "fluidics [noun] engineer" sounds right. Not sure how you'd convert thermal to noun.

Anyway, you're the expert in this field, but I suggest you just check. Something sounds wrong...
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Re: Resume 1 page review

Post by Joe » Wed May 01, 2019 1:54 am

specialized in two-phase loop systems

should be, I think:

specializing in two-phase loop systems

I would also drop the "a" in "a strong capacity" (as you have dropped other articles).
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Re: Resume 1 page review

Post by Joe » Wed May 01, 2019 1:57 am

Responsible of the thermohydraulic...

This is not English, and I'm not sure what you mean. There is some interference here from French. I think you mean:

EITHER
Responsible for the thermohydraulic...
OR
Manager of the thermohydraulic...
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Re: Resume 1 page review

Post by NeoGamaes » Wed May 01, 2019 4:32 am

Thx very much for your support Joe. I will correct and have a look to your advices

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Re: Resume 1 page review

Post by Joe » Wed May 01, 2019 4:52 am

I think I'm wrong about that first point.

Thermal and fluidic engineer :ok: seems to be ok, or at least people use fluidic AND fluidics

But the other points definitely need correcting.
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Re: Resume 1 page review

Post by NeoGamaes » Wed May 01, 2019 4:54 am

Joe wrote:
Wed May 01, 2019 4:52 am
I think I'm wrong about that first point.

Thermal and fluidic engineer :ok: seems to be ok, or at least people use fluidic AND fluidics
Alright, thx !

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