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sentence structure and clarity

Posted: Tue Oct 19, 2004 4:08 pm
by suhann

Does the following caption have:-

1. sentence structure; and
2. clarity?

"I was watching a documentary featuring a town called Omnicon.

Omnicon is the coldest town on earth where the temperature falls below 0C, to -72C."

Your comments please.

Thank you!

Posted: Wed Oct 20, 2004 12:23 pm
by Alan
Add a comma after 'earth', and it will be fine!