Example sentence check for grammar/cohesion

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Example sentence check for grammar/cohesion

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I was told that there is something wrong with this sentence and I might know what it is but I definitely don't know exactly whether I'm right or wrong so your help with this sentence would be really much appreciated. Thank you in advance.

So, what's your opinion on the following sentence:

The US provides so many different options from learning to live within different cultures and races to feeling the stunning excitement towards sport to realizing the typical American way of living the dream when money does not seem to be something to worry about.

Thank's so much for your help.
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Re: Example sentence check for grammar/cohesion

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1. 'stunning excitement' is a strange expression
2. 'excitement about', (not 'toward')
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