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vmthangaraj
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Please correct this paragraph

Post by vmthangaraj » Wed Nov 11, 2020 11:40 am

Once upon a time there was a poor farmer in the village. He had many hens. The Hens are laying eggs daily.
The farmer used to sell the eggs and run his family. One day hen laid a Golden egg. He sold a golden egg with huge money
The farmer was very happy and became very rich. One day farmer decided to kill the hen and get all golden eggs
from hen's stomach became rich instantly. Finally, he had killed hen and got disappointed because no eggs were present

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Re: Please correct this paragraph

Post by Briarpatch » Thu Nov 12, 2020 5:37 pm

  • The hens LAID eggs daily
    The farmer used to sell the eggs to support his family
    One day the hen laid a golden egg
    He sold the golden egg at a high price
    One day the farmer decided to kill the hen and get all golden eggs from the hen's stomach and become rich instantly.

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Re: Please correct this paragraph

Post by vmthangaraj » Sat Nov 14, 2020 10:11 am

Thank you so much for correcting my paragraph...

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Re: Please correct this paragraph

Post by KyLogan » Mon Dec 14, 2020 6:08 am

Briarpatch wrote:
Thu Nov 12, 2020 5:37 pm
  • The hens LAID eggs daily
    The farmer used to sell the eggs to support his family
    One day the hen laid a golden egg
    He sold the golden egg at a high price
    One day the farmer decided to kill the hen and get all golden eggs from the hen's stomach and become rich instantly.
Adding to this, the final sentence of the original para requires correction. "The farmer finally killed the hen and was disappointed not to find any eggs."

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