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sick of a phrase... :-((

Postby BadDisciple » Tue Dec 06, 2011 9:59 am

Of course I'll never speak English as well as a native English speaker...
So, could anyone give advice which one of the forms of the following expression
sounds right Englishwise:

1. "You and I know that perfect is no one"
2. "You and I know that a perfect one is none"
3. "You and I know that perfect one's no one"
4. "You and I know that a perfect one is no one"
5. "You and I know that to be perfect there's no one"
6. "You and I know that no one is a perfect one"
7. "You and I know that no perfect one exists"
Last but worst: "You and I know that perfection don't exist"

It's for a song and I've matched the syllables.
To give you the image, the BEST fitting one is (1.), the most unreal one:
"You and I know that perfect is no one". The number of syllables (10)
and the accent coherence of music and words in that form is really the best!
But I'm aware it's not a correct phrase...

Also I must say that the regular form like "no one is perfect"
(which should be used in proper speaking) doesn't fit the melodic accent,
it creates a hard shift of the accent on "perféct"
and it's really not nicely singable.

The best way to end the phrase should be with a word like "one", "no one" or "none".

I'm really sick of that phrase... :-((
Please, any suggestions will make me fly of joy!

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Re: sick of a phrase... :-((

Postby BadDisciple » Tue Dec 06, 2011 3:54 pm

Finally now I've come up with the following options:

1. "You and I know that perfect is no one"
2. "You and I know in perfection there's no one"
3. "You and I know that a perfect one is none"
4. "You and I know that perfect one's no one"
5. "You and I know that a perfect one is no one"
6. "You and I know that no one is a perfect one"
7. "You and I know that no one's a perfect one"
8. "You and I know that to be perfect there's no one"
9. "You and I know it's no perfect one there out"
10. (No good) "You and I know that no perfect one exists"
11. (Last and worst): "You and I know that perfection don't exist"

Please, delete the ones that don't stand at all and
leave those (if some) that are acceptable.

My problem is that, as it is for a song, I MUST match the word accents
with the music accents. In the case here, there is one music accent
exactly in the end, which makes it that the last word should be or
one-syllable, or with an accent on its last syllable.

Another concern is that when singing, the best words are those with
more vowels and less double/triple consonants together (rs, rf, ct, sts, etc.)

All these make it that words like "one", "none", "no one", "out" come to fit
just like paradise solutions...

And I’m still nowhere, while I must record this song that afternoon/evening
for a 1st test audition and record it definitely in the next 2 weeks the latest…

I would greatly appreciate every help.

Thanks in advance!

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Re: sick of a phrase... :-((

Postby TheStephen » Thu Dec 08, 2011 1:06 am

For people: "You and I know that nobody is perfect."
or
"You and I know that no one is perfect."

For things: "You and I know that nothing is perfect."


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