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A poem about grammar.

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Hi All,
One day in my grammar class, the instructor asked as to write poems about grammar. Actually, it was an assignment and at the same time a competition. I wrote a simple poem and it was like a conversation between me and other classmates. I want to you to share your opinion with me, please!

please! don't Laugh becuase it was the first time for me to write a poem.

Here ir the poem:


How happy I am!
When I attend the class
And how sad I am!
When I miss my class


Class? Class? Which class you mean?
Don't you know what I mean?
Class of grammar I mean
What can a student call him?
I've never seen like him


Him? Him? Who is him?
Sir, Doctor, you choose anything
Rayn, Robert, he accepts every thing
The lessons of grammar are useful
But we have to be careful


Really? Really? Do you mean that?
Yes, yes it's not easy,
But some chapters are maybe
Please! Don't think we are lazy
Cause we are going to be crazy


Crazy? Crazy? Why crazy?
Sometimes we sleep in the class
To keep attention we need a glass
We enjoy answering the question
But why reasons must be mentioned?


Oh student, how poor you are!
I think "Good Grammar" is a useful book
Answers are written at the end of the book
Look! Look! Please take a look!
To our most amazing book
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Post by Khokha »

Hi guys, are you joking? Where are you comments? Don't kill the poet inside me!
Common...encourage, compliment, or write anything!
Waiting 4 u :roll:
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Re: A poem about grammar.

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Khokha wrote: please! don't Laugh becuase it was the first time for me to write a poem.

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why should I laugh? for me it's a good poem, I can't write a poem like this cause I miss experience.

good work Khokha :wink:
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Post by Khokha »

Hello imad,

Actually, I always laugh when I read the poem. I can't believe that I wrote it. I feel the innocence between the words and it seems that it's a child's writing. I think you and every body can write poems, but you have to try first.
Thank you for your comment and good luck gold member :) .
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Post by fortminor »

its cool , but i don't like the style
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Thank you fortminor. I did not anderstand what do you mean by this style.
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Unsuitable and non-style..
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Post by Vega »

It seems like it was taken from Hip-Hop. I don't think that there's no style in that poem, I suppose it is a freestyle.
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Thank you InLove
It's ok kind Xkalibur.. thank you
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Post by Bassam »

HI khokha,,
i think u will be a mini-shakespeare poet :lol:

whatever it is sooo cool, fantastic, English lovely, and beautiful poem :oops:
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Post by Khokha »

Oh Bassam :oops:
Thank you so much…
By the way.. congratulation active guy.. you became a silver member :P
Are you happy :?:
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Khokha wrote:Oh Bassam :oops:
Thank you so much…
By the way.. congratulation active guy.. you became a silver member :P
Are you happy :?:
THANK U,, sure I'm so glad ,, 8)
and I'm looking foward for the best,, :oops:
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Post by rivulet »

Hi all, i am not a Gold member as well as a Silver member. However, i do hope i can join with every members in this website to write, to learn, and to know one another. I love poems very much, but i can write a poem in my native language only. What luck to me to know this great poem by Khokha. Thanks.
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Post by Khokha »

Welcome rivulet, I think you will be an active member soon. You can write a poem if you have something to write about.
Enjoy your time here and best wishes for you rivulet.
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Many thanks Khokha.
I will try my best to "translate" my poem to English as soon as possible ^^
Then, wait to see if i well done or not ^.*
Have a nice day.
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You too rivule and waiting for your poem pal :)
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Hic, it seems stupid. However, this is the first time i write my poem ^^. It includes only four sentence:
The moon is hight
The sky is blue
I am here
And, where are you ???
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Post by Khokha »

Hi rivulet,
What a nice poem! I like it and I think it's a good starting point for your writing dear. It seems like you are talking to your love in the dark night. He is absent and you are missing him. Am I right?
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You deserve an "A" for that.
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Thankx a lot bambang… :P It seems like you were an "A" student, weren't you?
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Call me uncle.

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Call me uncle my dear.
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Post by maksoora »

A poem about grammar.

What is lovely poem from lovely person and ur name is so interesting Khokha I like it . I like ur style I felt like soul of child in ur when u said these words .
By the way I read ur comment for mates I like the way u comment
Best wishes to u
Am looking for new from u


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Post by Snowy* »

Hahahahahahahaha :lol: :D :lol: :D :lol: :D
it's really funny but Ilike it ...
I wish if I can write something beautiful like U>> :D
tell me which university are U study
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Post by Khokha »

Thank you maksoora,
Your words make me want to fly.. believe me!

Hi Snowy*,
Thank you for your comment.. I'm from UAEU (United Arab Emirates University).
What about you?
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Post by Saku »

I like your poem too. It's stylist! 8)
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Post by yali »

Khokha, not to be put off by someone saying anything negative just cus someone is so discouraging and critical. (Of course they could if they themselves are professional poets/poetesses. But poets/esses don't critize others poems because they all know very well that poems are after all poems). Besides, aren't we composing them only for fun? Keep going Khokha, it's a wonderful and funny poem, or if it's not considered a poem, it's a fantasitic writing. Anyway, I like it. Give yourself 5 gold star stickers(it's the max number) which I often do to my son when he reaches his goal and he sticks them on the calender. Weeeeeell done :!:
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Thank you Saku..
Thank you very much yali.. I like your words :P
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Post by gem »

Khoka you'll go far...a good start for a poet....i like it.....5 star for you!!! :D
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Hi, I'm a new visitor. Do tell me 'bout this page, Is that OK???? :?: :?: :?: :roll: :shock: 8)
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denvinbo wrote:Hi, I'm a new visitor. Do tell me 'bout this page, Is that OK???? :?: :?: :?: :roll: :shock: 8)
Yes, it is.

Welcome aboard.
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Re: A poem about grammar.

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Khokha wrote:Hi All,
One day in my grammar class, the instructor asked as to write poems about grammar. Actually, it was an assignment and at the same time a competition. I wrote a simple poem and it was like a conversation between me and other classmates. I want to you to share your opinion with me, please!

please! don't Laugh because it was the first time for me to write a poem.

Here ir the poem:


How happy I am!
When I attend the class
And how sad I am!
When I miss my class


Class? Class? Which class you mean?
Don't you know what I mean?
Class of grammar I mean
What can a student call him?
I've never seen like him


Him? Him? Who is him?
Sir, Doctor, you choose anything
Rayn, Robert, he accepts every thing
The lessons of grammar are useful
But we have to be careful


Really? Really? Do you mean that?
Yes, yes it's not easy,
But some chapters are maybe
Please! Don't think we are lazy
Cause we are going to be crazy


Crazy? Crazy? Why crazy?
Sometimes we sleep in the class
To keep attention we need a glass
We enjoy answering the question
But why reasons must be mentioned?


Oh student, how poor you are!
I think "Good Grammar" is a useful book
Answers are written at the end of the book
Look! Look! Please take a look!
To our most amazing book
Is it true that these were the first poems you've done... hmm, I think you've composed a lot before these...
These are all wonderful! :)
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