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Postby shakespear » Sun Feb 10, 2008 6:05 am

THE SLAVE
Slip my collar, give me freedom
Don't yoke me more than this
Your eyes captured me, I lost wisdom
I beg you nothing, but a will to kiss
Loving you truly, I got nothing
My heart bleeds, as a killed bird
There was, in my ears, a bell ring
Repeating your speech, word by word
our life is like a night mare

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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Sun Feb 10, 2008 12:27 pm

Good....
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What do you think about this?

Clouds float gently
Many distressed
Still in the heart
To the cold rain pour
Every night
I feel unhappy
Do you know???
In the middle of rolling dark
Your love like a dream
Blue the hope
Lead my life steps
To pass the bitter
Take away the dark clouds
Funny sun's shine
Sparkling and warm.....
When the rain stop
Our love is out of difficulty
Roll all long night
For the sun shine
So I will happy
And there's no doubt
Love like a song
Hand in hand
To give the warmth
And those two
Happy when they see
Each other.....
In a new day
Sunlight grow up the trees
And spread to all the yard
Sunlight pass through
The leaf canopy....
Wind play with the butterfly
Funny steps...
Happy and sweetly
We go together
To the peaceful place.....
Hey! I'm stuck! Get me out!

PIETY-The stories of parents and children

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:34 am

YOU HAVE GOOD WORDS AND GOOD IDEA AND I HOPE YOU`LL BE A GOOD POET BUT YOU`D BETTER SAY"breeese play with the butterfly " instead of "Wind play with the butterfly" .GOOD LUCK AND THANKS A LOT .
our life is like a night mare

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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Mon Feb 11, 2008 11:10 am

Thank you.......
Hey! I'm stuck! Get me out!

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Re: poem

Postby AASA » Tue Feb 12, 2008 8:17 am

so beautiful ....

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Postby shakespear » Tue Feb 12, 2008 9:20 am

AAsa I`d like to thank you. :D
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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Tue Feb 12, 2008 10:31 am

I'm listening to the wave of river's sound
I'm listening to the String wind's sound
Listen to the flowers
Love someone
Flare up on this world.

I'm listening to my voice
I'm listening...listening
Listen to my heart
Like as walking on the village.

The city tonight is full of stars
The river tonight is full of stars, too
Near your house
The ylang-ylang spread it perfume immensely
Night fog fly gently.

The city tonight is full of string
The vast love of cloud
Become a funny day
Just can't forget the old days
Return to the horizon
My city..........

What do you think about this???
Hey! I'm stuck! Get me out!

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Tue Feb 12, 2008 11:31 am

You`re really a poet and I hope nice future for you.Really I hope to reach at your level but it seems imposible.Good luck and thanks .
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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Wed Feb 13, 2008 10:47 am

Nice command, thanks........
Hey! I'm stuck! Get me out!

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Wed Feb 13, 2008 10:53 am

not at all,my friend.
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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Wed Feb 13, 2008 10:59 am

I'll write your name
To all the stars
And I know in you
That there're many aspiration
'Cause you can't see the sun
When you are standing on the ground

But the ray of hopes
Will never dissolve into nothingness
'Cause I'm near you
To bring your blue
Let's believe in miracle
'Cause tomorrow will never wilt
You and me in a dream
Only us.

Have you ever know that
The sky is full of stars
Have you ever sing loudly
many people 'round you
Do they see the love
That it makes you happy.

Do you know on this world
I'm the one still love you
Bring many hopes
With many things to say
But you'd never know me
If you saw the sun.

Want to be near when you smile
Want to see the wind
Glide past your hair
The singing I wrote for you
Hope you will sing it in future.

The sea of love
Still makes you faraway
Many night
Drizzling rain's sound was gently
Hope the sky help me once
Make you know 'bout my love.
Hey! I'm stuck! Get me out!

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Thu Feb 14, 2008 7:23 am

GOOD DAY FOR EVERY ONE
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Postby denvinbo » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:11 am

I hope so..............
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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Wed Feb 27, 2008 10:20 am

Hi all of you ,I`d like to thank you. Good luck .
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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Mon Mar 17, 2008 10:13 am

Hi everyone,nice to meet u again. Good luck
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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Mon Mar 17, 2008 10:34 am

Hi denvinbo. I think it`s fantastic .Go ahead and good luck.
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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Wed May 14, 2008 8:31 am

Hi
Where r u denvinbo
I want to hear about u and ur poems
Bye
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Re: poem

Postby alkhader » Sat May 17, 2008 1:24 pm

What do you think about this?

Clouds float gently
Many distressed
Still in the heart
To the cold rain pour
Every night
I feel unhappy
Do you know???
In the middle of rolling dark
Your love like a dream
Blue the hope
Lead my life steps
To pass the bitter
Take away the dark clouds
Funny sun's shine
Sparkling and warm.....
When the rain stop
Our love is out of difficulty
Roll all long night
For the sun shine
So I will happy
And there's no doubt
Love like a song
Hand in hand
To give the warmth
And those two
Happy when they see
Each other.....
In a new day
Sunlight grow up the trees
And spread to all the yard
Sunlight pass through
The leaf canopy....
Wind play with the butterfly
Funny steps...
Happy and sweetly
We go together
To the peaceful place.....


The person who submit this peom I say to him Thank u 4 ever for it
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Re: poem

Postby sweets » Sat May 17, 2008 1:47 pm

shakespear wrote:THE SLAVE
Slip my collar, give me freedom
Don't yoke me more than this
Your eyes captured me, I lost wisdom
I beg you nothing, but a will to kiss
Loving you truly, I got nothing
My heart bleeds, as a killed bird
There was, in my ears, a bell ring
Repeating your speech, word by word


shakspear, you remind me with AUM Kulthom's song but i only remmber a line "give my freedom realse my hanns"اعطني حريتي اطلق يدي so here u make a simily between love and slave sometimes love is slave but we choose to be slaves

cheeeeeeeeeeeers
دخلت حياتي كنسمة وخرجت منها كإعصار

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Re: poem

Postby murugan » Sat May 17, 2008 7:04 pm

Dear Sweets

See, .... that blacgurad(psycho) disappeard.

Other guyes are O.K.

you are creating everybody as they are like a poet.

One by one try to show their best. I welcome it.

But you are so far away from Tora, Hardi, Bang uncle..etc...

resently you did not touch with them like in the past.

Thouch with them soon

bye
murugan

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Sun May 18, 2008 9:07 am

Hi murugan
I didn`t allege that I`m like the greatest poems but at least I`m trying and we all have to try.
Nevertheless I thank u for ur comment.
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