Here I'm !

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Here I'm !

Post by olfa » Mon Jan 14, 2008 8:08 pm

Here I'm , standing alone
thinking of the whole ,but not in a specefic thing
I felt something big and huge enter to my heart
make me anable to breath
I tried to scream loudly, but I couldn't
I want to go out walk and walk
and let my feet follow my steps
I looked arround
many poeple are there
but I was an alian
no one know me, no one can see me, no one can understand
I wanted to say a word
but my mouth just was anable to say even one
I heard someone calling me
I turned happily to see who
oups ,again
I missed the call
it wasn't for me
I said why ?
Why me?
Why each time I want to laugh,something inside make me anable to?
why each time I want to be happy
life be my ennemy
so when?when my happy days will occur?
when my hurt will leave me?
when I find happiness??

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Re: Here I'm !

Post by olfa » Tue Jan 15, 2008 4:54 pm

thanks Racheed :wink:
I always find reliese when I write in english, you know, sometimes we can't find no body just a paper and a pen can make us release ah?

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Re: Here I'm !

Post by denvinbo » Thu Jan 17, 2008 10:26 am

Not bad.....there's some pretty words in your poem.... :D :D :D

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Post by shakespear » Sun Feb 10, 2008 9:50 am

your poem is very sweet and i feel it`s very close to my heart and i feel you`re really close to my heart but i want to advise you don`t be pessimistic, and your honney days will occure and also the pain will leave your heart .
our life is like a night mare

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Post by shakespear » Mon Feb 11, 2008 7:52 am

EVERY DAY I WANT TO READ THIS POEM . SO I PLEASE YOU TO ACCEPT ME AS A FRIEND. THANKS A LOT.
our life is like a night mare

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Re: Here I'm !

Post by olfa » Thu Feb 14, 2008 5:32 am

Hey shakespear :) Thanks for your attention, and I do agree to be your friend of course :wink: :mrgreen:

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Re: Here I'm !

Post by Krisi » Sat Jun 28, 2008 12:36 am

It's really nice! The title is almost similar to the one shared to me by my friend... :-)
Thanks.
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Re: Here I'm !

Post by shakespear » Sat Jun 28, 2008 7:49 am

hi olfa
this i sthe 3rd time i find myself attracted to ur poem and i like it , why ? i don`t know but maybe because it`s sad and reflect sth in our spirits.
Go ahead, don`t stop, u r on the poetry way.
c u soon & thnx
our life is like a night mare

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Re: Here I'm !

Post by JasmineQ » Sat Jun 28, 2008 10:20 am

hi olfa

I like your words so much

they are very attractive

Jasmine
Prophet peace be upon him said, "Whoever loves to meet Allah, Allah loves to meet him"

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