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poem

Postby shakespear » Sat Feb 09, 2008 2:02 pm

crocodile Tears


I'll go away for ever more
From you I got only pain
You don't care for my groan
Tears on cheeks are like rain
I'll leave and you will see
That I'll take the first train

* * *
Lament. . Lament crocodile Tears
Can't utterly persuade me
Don't you remember past days?
Together we were at the sea
Thence you swore to me
That your love I'll be

* * *
Your conceit is lovely thing
Look at me I became thin
You know you `re full of guilt
And god won't forgive your sin
Our love has become fight
In this fight you must win
our life is like a night mare

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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Sun Feb 10, 2008 5:52 am

Where's it from??
Hey! I'm stuck! Get me out!

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Sun Feb 10, 2008 6:00 am

THIS POEM IS MINE AND I PRODUCE IT. DON`T BE AMAZED.
our life is like a night mare

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Re: poem

Postby Bambang » Sun Feb 10, 2008 8:15 am

shakespear wrote:THIS POEM IS MINE AND I PRODUCE IT. DON`T BE AMAZED.


Beautifully written!
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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Sun Feb 10, 2008 12:23 pm

Good....Better than I used to be.....
Hey! I'm stuck! Get me out!

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Mon Feb 11, 2008 9:25 am

denvinbo ,MY FRIEND ,WHY DO YOU SAY THAT ? AREN`T YOU USED TO READ LIKE THIS ? BE OVER THIS LEVEL ; THNKS A LOT.
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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Thu Feb 14, 2008 7:18 am

hi my friends I want to thank you and hope to meet in future . Bye
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Re: poem

Postby Vega » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:03 am

Hi there. I like your poem. :wink:

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Re: poem

Postby Krisi » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:30 am

shakespear wrote:crocodile Tears


I'll go away for ever more
From you I got only pain
You don't care for my groan
Tears on cheeks are like rain
I'll leave and you will see
That I'll take the first train

* * *
Lament. . Lament crocodile Tears
Can't utterly persuade me
Don't you remember past days?
Together we were at the sea
Thence you swore to me
That your love I'll be

* * *
Your conceit is lovely thing
Look at me I became thin
You know you `re full of guilt
And god won't forgive your sin
Our love has become fight
In this fight you must win



This poems are sad.
I admire people who can write effectively but just wondering do you feel what you write?
You've got a thread of poems here and they are all sad... Why? :roll:

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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:35 am

That is his state of mind..........
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Re: poem

Postby Krisi » Thu Feb 14, 2008 10:54 am

denvinbo wrote:That is his state of mind..........


Hi denvinbo,
Yes, I know that. But is it wrong to know? Do you really think it's nice to think in this way?
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Re: poem

Postby denvinbo » Thu Feb 14, 2008 11:38 am

I think he is missing someone........
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Re: poem

Postby Krisi » Thu Feb 14, 2008 11:39 am

denvinbo wrote:I think he is missing someone........


How'd you think of that? Don' make a story here. :)
You're not him, are you? :P
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Postby denvinbo » Thu Feb 14, 2008 11:43 am

I haven't make any story yet............... :)
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Re: poem

Postby Krisi » Thu Feb 14, 2008 12:51 pm

Denvinbo, a single word could possess a lot of different meanings, to plenty of people with different culture. :)
A word may not or could mean too much to me but this is not applicable to all because we really think in different ways. :)

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Thu Feb 14, 2008 12:57 pm

krisi my friend we all must write what we feel inside our hearts . thanks
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Re: poem

Postby Krisi » Thu Feb 14, 2008 1:04 pm

shakespear wrote:krisi my friend we all must write what we feel inside our hearts . thanks


Thanks.
Maybe I have got no more feelings because I couldn't write anymore. :)

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Re: poem

Postby Bambang » Thu Feb 14, 2008 2:24 pm

shakespear wrote:krisi my friend we all must write what we feel inside our hearts . thanks


Not everything we feel should be revealed. :D
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Re: poem

Postby sweets » Thu Feb 14, 2008 2:44 pm

i like this poem it's sensitive one
دخلت حياتي كنسمة وخرجت منها كإعصار

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Re: poem

Postby Krisi » Fri Feb 15, 2008 4:32 am

bambang wrote:
shakespear wrote:krisi my friend we all must write what we feel inside our hearts . thanks


Not everything we feel should be revealed. :D


Thanks Uncle B. I'll remember this for the rest of my life. :)

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Re: poem

Postby shakespear » Sun Feb 17, 2008 6:51 am

Thank you all of you .Xkalibur my friend I want to thank you too and good luck .
our life is like a night mare


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