FLOWERS
Flower is my friend.
Because when I feel myself sad.
I open my books.
Where you fragrance my feeling.
You are an only one.
Who knows about my sorrows?
You are a true friend.
Because you participate always in my joys and sorrows.
You are lovely dear.
A feeling of a good friend always comes in my heart.
When I remember you in my dear's hand.
When she looks you in love.
There is a expressions for me.
That's why I love you most.
Because you are my dears love.
Flowers
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- shakespear
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Re: Flowers
Your poem "Flowers" is good but you have some mistakes .
You say"a only one" ....... You have to say " an only one "
You say"who know " ....... You have to say " who knows"
You say"always come" ....... You have to say " always comes "
You say"a expression" ....... You have to say " an expression "
my friend you have good idea and expression so don`t stop and go on , good luck.
You say"a only one" ....... You have to say " an only one "
You say"who know " ....... You have to say " who knows"
You say"always come" ....... You have to say " always comes "
You say"a expression" ....... You have to say " an expression "
my friend you have good idea and expression so don`t stop and go on , good luck.
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Re: Flowers
thanks shakespear I don't know how can these common mistakes be done by me. I really had not checked it out again for my satisfactory
I have edited my mistakes:)
I have edited my mistakes:)
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Re: Flowers
sweets wrote:so nice to adress a peom for flowers :)
thanks "sweets" It's my just first attempt which I have shared with you
thanks for that humble reply:)
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Re: Flowers
Nice poem..
What a lucky friend you have !!!
What a lucky friend you have !!!
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Re: Flowers
nice done, i can also feel that kind of affection.
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Re: Flowers
Thanks dear snowy* for liking itSnowy* wrote:Nice poem..
What a lucky friend you have !!!
Some lines are arising in my mind so want to share with you
"New friends may be a poem, but old friends are alphabet because you will need them to read poem"
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Re: Flowers
Sunnypk wrote:Thanks dear snowy* for liking itSnowy* wrote:Nice poem..
What a lucky friend you have !!!
Some lines are arising in my mind so want to share with you
"New friends may be a poem, but old friends are alphabet because you will need them to read poem"
THANKS
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Re: Flowers
but untill I am looking forward to lucky friends here. I think some of the members don't have trust at me yet? :(Snowy* wrote:THANKSSunnypk wrote:Thanks dear snowy* for liking itSnowy* wrote:Nice poem..
What a lucky friend you have !!!
Some lines are arising in my mind so want to share with you
"New friends may be a poem, but old friends are alphabet because you will need them to read poem"
As you sew, so shall you reap
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Re: Flowers
8) 8) 8)but untill I am looking forward to lucky friends here. I think some of the members don't have trust at me yet?
Really!!!
You must think of an excuse for them maybe they have a good resone for not trusting you or may be they don't like making friends by internet .
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Snowy* wrote:8) 8) 8)but untill I am looking forward to lucky friends here. I think some of the members don't have trust at me yet?
Really!!!
You must think of an excuse for them maybe they have a good reason for not trusting you or may be they don't like making friends by internet .
Thanks for your openion/idea.
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Re: Flowers
This is really sweet...Sunnypk wrote:FLOWERS
Flower is my friend.
Because when I feel myself sad.
I open my books.
Where you fragrance my feeling.
You are an only one.
Who knows about my sorrows?
You are a true friend.
Because you participate always in my joys and sorrows.
You are lovely dear.
A feeling of a good friend always comes in my heart.
When I remember you in my dear's hand.
When she looks you in love.
There is a expressions for me.
That's why I love you most.
Because you are my dears love.
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