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once upon time

Postby sweets » Sat Apr 26, 2008 12:19 pm

once upon time we were two
we shared everything
dreams ...hopes... sadness ...ups and downs

once upon time
you promise me that you will stay forever ...for me..
you say that my love is big as sea ..as sky ..as earth

now iam standing in front of you'r grave put the roses you like
now iam here alone without you're kindness you're smile

once upon time we were two
now iam a lone

cheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeers
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Re: once upon time

Postby AlexVlasoff » Sat Apr 26, 2008 2:12 pm

It's funny! :D
I am not in my way, it's only reflection.
My innocent soul has not ressurection.

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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Sun Apr 27, 2008 1:46 pm

thank u AlexVlasoff
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Re: once upon time

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:18 am

Hi sweet
ur poem is really excellent and i think u r on the right street to be good poet
GOOD LUCK
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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:31 am

shakespear said, "ur poem is really excellent and i think u r on the right street to be good poet"

shall i be good poet one day??????????????????
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Re: once upon time

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:42 am

why not
don`t reduce ur activeness, u r really good
no kidding
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Postby sweets » Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:52 am

i'll take ur advice in consideration
thanx
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Re: once upon time

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:55 am

notatall
u r welcome
i want to advise to read more english poet
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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Wed Apr 30, 2008 9:11 am

well
u know that iam studing english lit. so i am studying poems and novels and so on but i do not like poems we took almost of stusy about romantisim
in fact i like realistic more
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Re: once upon time

Postby shakespear » Thu May 01, 2008 7:35 am

hello
sweet read anything .it`s up to u & u r free to what u wish,we must read to progress in writing.
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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Thu May 01, 2008 10:01 am

thanks and yes we have to

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Re: once upon time

Postby murugan » Thu May 01, 2008 6:44 pm

Hello Sweets,

I have seen your poem. It is really fantastic

But my mind likes to say something to me that is

It is not a poem

You have lost your realove,real partner, real friend, real would be for ever but his love is living always in your heart

So, your heart is weaping always, I think you are watching it, at that time your heart delivered this words

but you are living as you are happily for the society

in your innerworld you are languishing for his love and unable to forget him moreover you are living with his heart,his words...etc.

Do not worry, his love makes a new happy life for you in future and his heart also weaping in the sky because he left so far away from you and may be he is guiding you for a new happy life soon,you can see soon.

I realised you heart is still weaping
here nobody can understand, they are appreciating without the truth, I think.

Please forgive me if I said wrongly

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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Sat May 03, 2008 1:41 pm

hi murugan
first thanks for ur reply,yes i lost someone imporant in my life and try to contiue this life without him.

you know life sometimes forced us to waer mask to cover our pains

and here iam

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Re: once upon time

Postby murugan » Sat May 03, 2008 6:20 pm

Hello Sweets

"you know life sometimes forced us to wear mask to cover our pains".
Another beatiful sentence came out from you.

I think, in you, his thoughts developes you in another way who you are.

For example,

Now, some of us readed your poem and we are expecting more in you

Today 4 of us have enjoyed your poem tomorrow 4 million people may be know about you such a great poet.

The world is waiting, try something.

God bless you

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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Sun May 04, 2008 2:17 pm

hi
well i smile when i read ur sentence
"Today 4 of us have enjoyed your poem tomorrow 4 million people may be know about you such a great poet." first cuz. you give me a reson to write not to express myself only but also to reflect how other see this world maybe my writes(in my mother tongue )express it more but if we do not find a way to express ourselves maybe we become mad.the second reson for my smile is that iam not looking to publish my poems if i could call them by this name but i'll try something new sooner.

cheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeers and thanks for ur words
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Re: once upon time

Postby murugan » Thu Jun 19, 2008 7:10 pm

Report this postReply with quote once upon time
by sweets on Sat Apr 26, 2008 12:19 pm

once upon time we were two
we shared everything
dreams ...hopes... sadness ...ups and downs

once upon time
you promise me that you will stay forever ...for me..
you say that my love is big as sea ..as sky ..as earth

now iam standing in front of you'r grave put the roses you like
now iam here alone without you're kindness you're smile

once upon time we were two
now iam a lone

Nobody here the real heart weeped.Here everybody consider this heart ,sportively

If he is here she will not ask anybody what she shall do in future?
definately he would guide her which is the best job for her in future and sweets gives all rights to him what to do for her because he is her heart. The heart is saying always goodthings. Am I right sweets.

Love is Bhaskar

Murugan
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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Fri Jun 20, 2008 2:09 pm

Love is Bhaskar

how do u know about ????????????????????????????
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Re: once upon time

Postby Annaa » Sun Jun 22, 2008 11:25 am

sweets wrote:once upon time we were two
we shared everything
dreams ...hopes... sadness ...ups and downs

once upon time
you promise me that you will stay forever ...for me..
you say that my love is big as sea ..as sky ..as earth

now iam standing in front of you'r grave put the roses you like
now iam here alone without you're kindness you're smile

once upon time we were two
now iam a lone

cheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeers



For who is this poem ?
If you don`t like me remember it's mind over matter..I don't mind and you don't matter..

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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Mon Jun 23, 2008 6:04 am

i can not tell Anna
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Re: once upon time

Postby Annaa » Mon Jun 23, 2008 11:20 am

sweets wrote:i can not tell Anna




:lol: :lol: :lol: I think that is for a boy that you loved a lot,but he didn`t love you :-? :-? :-?
If you don`t like me remember it's mind over matter..I don't mind and you don't matter..

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Re: once upon time

Postby sweets » Mon Jun 23, 2008 1:44 pm

what i can only tell you that it was a lovely strange experince and iam sorry that it ended like this

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