when night comes

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when night comes

Postby sweets » Thu Jul 24, 2008 12:46 pm

our memories return to us
see,touch ,or enjoy with
those memories which we do not know when how why we had

our memories back as vision ghost song or smile
but unfortunately we can not remember for whom so we cry

we might feel sick for these memories
but we always wait such nights to live thorough it and remember or try to
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Re: when night comes

Postby Annaa » Mon Jul 28, 2008 8:44 am

I`m happy that I will give first comment 4 ur poem :mrgreen: :oops: .
I like it very much.
Keep it sweets. {-; :-D
If you don`t like me remember it's mind over matter..I don't mind and you don't matter..

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Re: when night comes

Postby sweets » Mon Jul 28, 2008 11:22 am

thanx honey
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Re: when night comes

Postby shakespear » Sun Aug 03, 2008 12:25 pm

hi sweet and congratulations
sorry koz i wasnot the 1st who read ur great poems but forgive me that long time ago i didn`t visit this club.
ur poem seem deep and sad .it rather reminds me the dark , don`t ask me why koz i don`t know the cause and its very close to my heart and now i know why koz it reflects the feelings inside my heart. sometimes i feel i who wrote it because of the style.
in ur poem u used "or" twice "song or smile" and "remember or try to" and u succeed in that, even at 1st time i read
it i feel its heavy on ears but its ok.
congatulations again and ahead , really u r a poetess.
good luck
c u later
bye
our life is like a night mare

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Re: when night comes

Postby sweets » Sun Aug 03, 2008 2:28 pm

shakespear
before any thing thank you so much for ur words they are really give me power to write

when we are going to read new poem
iam looking to read something with joy for u and i know u can do it

cheeeeeeeeeers
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Re: when night comes

Postby shakespear » Thu Aug 07, 2008 8:34 am

hi sweey
thnx 4 ur reply
go ahead
don`t pay attention to whom say that u r not a poetess
trust me
c u
good luck
bye
our life is like a night mare

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Re: when night comes

Postby sweets » Thu Aug 07, 2008 4:49 pm

(don`t pay attention to whom say that u r not a poetess)

no oone said so wether iam poetess or not for me i do not care since ican express myself in the way i like
thanx for being care

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Re: when night comes

Postby teardrops » Thu Oct 16, 2008 1:24 pm

I like it
Raindrops,my teardrops. Falling from above,i dont have your love.


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