ON HER BIRTHDAY

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rksingh
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ON HER BIRTHDAY

Postby rksingh » Thu Jun 19, 2008 11:03 am

For Winny

I want the best of life for you
but you too must understand
what I can't do

you must be patient and do
what you can--
I can't create the fruits

I may create space
for you to stand but I can't
become the legs

you must run the race
on your own and be
what you dream

the redness of mars
and the whiteness of moon
merge in you

you have worlds to conquer
and miles to go, my dear

you must rear the goose
and have the gold each day



--R.K.SINGH

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Krisi
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Re: ON HER BIRTHDAY

Postby Krisi » Tue Jun 24, 2008 9:20 am

This is really nice! 8-)

But the last two lines seem vague to me... I know that it's from the Jack and Beanstalk story (the goose that can lay a golden egg) but what do you mean by that in your poem? :oops: :oops:

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Re: ON HER BIRTHDAY

Postby rksingh » Thu Aug 14, 2008 11:58 am

Thanks Krisi for your comment on my poem.
R K

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Re: ON HER BIRTHDAY

Postby teardrops » Fri Oct 17, 2008 9:00 pm

A nice poem
Raindrops,my teardrops. Falling from above,i dont have your love.

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Re: ON HER BIRTHDAY

Postby angeleyez » Fri Oct 17, 2008 11:04 pm

very nice poem...you are very good to write poems.. :mrgreen:
Please... Correct me if I have a spelling mistake !

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Re: ON HER BIRTHDAY

Postby rksingh » Tue May 05, 2009 6:03 pm

Thanks teardrops and angeleyez for stopping by this poem and commenting on it.
R K


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